Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Duel in the Gnarls cave

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Duel in the Gnarls cave

• Nominated by: Cade Calrayn 22:08, May 16, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: The beginning of my Hero of Tython project for Wookieeproject The Old Republic.

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 15:59, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
2. Good work. However, please watch your linking, as I've had to fix a lot of it in your articles. Also, the category for Category:Battles of the Flesh Raider uprising does not exist. You can either make a category for it, or remove that category from this article. I'll leave that to your discretion.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 20:50, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
   • Sorry, I added that in preparation of my work on the JK's story on Tython. I'll make it now. Cade Calrayn 22:44, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
3. Plagueis327 18:07, May 27, 2012 (UTC)
4. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 14:26, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
5. Enochf 14:27, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
6. Had a few more things, but Cav seems to be addressing them with you so I'll let him take over. CC7567 ^(talk) 20:31, June 16, 2012 (UTC)
7. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 21:50, June 16, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Kasra

• I could be wrong, but aren't words such as "unknown" not allowed in the infobox?
  • Eh. Done. Cade Calrayn 14:31, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
• Intro: the Jedi's remarkable combat skill resulted in Callef's death... Isn't "remarkable" POV?
  • Actually, Derrin Weller stresses the fact that the Jedi Knight character is exceptionally skilled in combat, even for a Padawan. It's part of the character's backstory that you can learn about in the game's first conversation with him. Cade Calrayn 14:31, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
    • Okey doke.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 15:59, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
• That's all for the moment, bro.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 07:46, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
  • Very interesting, Cade. Gotta get a better laptop.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 15:59, May 20, 2012 (UTC)

Exiled Jedi

• Please mention the 15 Flesh Raiders and the fact that they died in the body of the article.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 02:23, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
  • Eh. I put "over half a dozen", since the number's technically game mechanics. Cade Calrayn 03:41, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
    • If it's game mechanics then I would put over a dozen in the infobox as well and then put a mention of the fifteen in the behind the scenes explaining why it is game mechanics.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:19, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
      • Added to the BTS, but I left the 15 and "over a dozen", since there's 13 before the player fights Callef and 2 guards. Cade Calrayn 13:47, May 31, 2012 (UTC)

Attack of the Clone

• In the body, I would recommend introducing Callef as a Dark Jedi much earlier, instead of when he's about to die in the article text.
  • Done.
    • If you add a new link earlier in the text, you need to make sure that you do not leave other links where they should not be. Currently Dark Jedi is linked twice in the body. Please watch for this in the future. CC7567 ^(talk) 22:38, June 11, 2012 (UTC)
      • Woops. Linked to Dark Jedi earlier when I discussed Bengel Morr, but there should only be one link now. Cade Calrayn 13:50, June 14, 2012 (UTC)
• "When the apprentice met with the Jedi Council at the Temple": is there enough info to assume that this "Jedi Council" is the Jedi High Council?
• Not an objection per se, but since both Callef and the Hero of Tython are "apprentices," I would highly suggest using "Padawan" more prominently to refer to the Jedi apprentice, as the usage can get confused with Callef. CC7567 ^(talk) 23:35, June 10, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 15:58, June 11, 2012 (UTC)

Cav

• The year needs to be mentioned in the intro and main body - its currently exclusive to the infobox.
  • Done.
• Context for the Flesh Raider uprising - why were they attacking the Jedi and Twi'lek's? Is it ever revealed?
  • Bengel Morr's gone kooky, and wants to destroy the order to make a new one. Added.
• Do we know why the Bith apprentice was in the cave? - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 12:06, June 13, 2012 (UTC)
  • He was the one who saw the Flesh Raiders entering the Gnarls through the cave, and was captured trying to investigate. Added. Cade Calrayn 13:50, June 14, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:50, June 16, 2012 (UTC)