Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Dorosii the Hutt

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Dorosii the Hutt

  • Nominated by: Kilson(Let's have a chat) 04:37, June 16, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: This applies to Tranner's "The Hutt" thing. Every source refers to him as Dorosii the Hutt

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Can someone archive this nom? I already have a new one standing by. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:41, June 21, 2011 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 17:55, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
  3. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 20:23, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
  4. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 19:47, June 30, 2011 (UTC)
  5. ACvote—Tommy 9281 Thursday, June 30, 2011, 20:20 UTC

Object

Moffship
  • The phrase "death Cult of M'dweshuu" looks weird. Saying it was a death cult is one thing, but saying it in this manner is something else, since "Cult" is part of the organization's title.
    • Rephrased
  • I'd suggest rearranging the first sentence of the bio to move the context for the Periphery, as it looks somewhat out of place against the rest of the sentence.
    • How does that sound?
  • "...Dorosii attempted to convince Republic authorities that local Hutt authorities..." - Please substitute one of the "authorities" here with a synonym.
    • Done
  • You could probably merge "and that the Republic should not intervene" into the first clause of that sentence to improve the flow a bit.
    • How's that?
  • The dates of the HoloNet News article's release and the CSWE's publication would be nice for the BTS.
    • Added
  • During my copyedit, I corrected a few grammatical errors that really shouldn't have been there. Please be more careful in the future. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 01:16, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
    • Thanks you for the review Tranner. I'm going to slow down my rate of writing to address this situation. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 12:39, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • Please check WP:DASH and see if there's anything you can correct in the article. CC7567 (talk) 23:50, June 23, 2011 (UTC)
    • Is that better? I apologize, I'm trying to better understand when to use and not use en dashes. Thanks for the review. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 20:21, June 24, 2011 (UTC)

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