Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Death Star's shield generator

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Death Star's shield generator

  • Nominated by: Shayn Mikel (talk) 18:28, July 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:

(0 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)

Support

  1. --Jedi Lover/Riverdale Chauffeur (Wanna Discuss Something?) 19:06, July 12, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Riverdale
Tommy
  • What card in Star Wars: Force Collection? Please use Template:ForceCollection.
    • I never had the game and the sourcing at Dyer's article is also incomplete. Since the game is down, I don't know of a way to access this information. Should I remove it for being unsourced, or is there a way to look up the relevant card? Shayn Mikel (talk) 18:55, July 12, 2018 (UTC)
      • Try this. This is what the template automatically links to. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:57, July 12, 2018 (UTC)
  • Please establish a timeline.
  • Please watch your image caption punctuation per Wookieepedia:Layout_Guide#Images. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:49, July 12, 2018 (UTC)
Clone
  • Similar to the Legends page for this and other pages dealing with structures, there should be a "Description" section before the "History" section that describes the structure physical and aesthetic attributes, and its purpose and role.
  • I would also recommend that you check out some of the behind the scene sourcebooks and materials for Return of the Jedi and see if the "Behind the Scenes" section couldn't be fleshed out more in some manner.--Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 03:42, July 17, 2018 (UTC)
    • DoneShayn Mikel (talk) 03:41, July 23, 2018 (UTC)
      • Couple of things.
        • 1) It still feels very anemic. For example, other than just "*a large building*," there's really no detail on the building(s) themselves, such as colors, markings, etc... The fact that AT-Ats can dock to the landing pad's lower catwalks would probably be a necessary detail (And in the history section, the fact that these catwalks were used as the meeting place of Luke and Vader). Further more, if the entire Imperial outpost on Endor is this article's purpose, including the landing pad, the dish, and the bunker entrances as it seems to infer, then that all needs a lot more mention and description. The bunker that Han and company infiltrate, for example, contains a lot of generator looking stuff. More pictures detailing some of these, ah, details would also probably help as the section expands.
        • 2) Was there nothing to add to the BtS section, then? Just, curious.
  • 4 ABY seems to be infobox exclusive. As the above reviewer noted, a timeline needs to be established.
  • "They constructed the weapon in orbit of the Forest Moon of Endor and constructed a shield generator facility to protect the Death Star II from attacks on the site of an Ewok village they destroyed." I feel this line would be better suited in the Description section, and the History section could possibly use a quick mention of the same information but in far briefer detail.
  • History can be Sub-sectioned. Probably between the history of it's construction/arrival on the moon and the combat seen in the movie. That officer who calls the Rebels scum after capturing them in the bunker, his line could make a good quote for the second section. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:31, July 25, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Unaddressed objection(s) over 10 days old. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 15:42, July 25, 2018 (UTC)
  2. ACvote “Now, young GAN, you will die.” MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 15:48, July 25, 2018 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Imperators II(Talk) 11:22, July 26, 2018 (UTC)