Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Darth Ruyn

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Darth Ruyn

• Nominated by: Grunny ^(Talk) 12:15, 2 April 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Legacy

(4 ACs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 12:44, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
2. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 01:03, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
3. Graestan^(Talk) 21:57, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
4. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 08:03, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
5. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:55, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
6. ShaakTi1138 21:09, 9 April 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. Graestan the Merciless:
   • The word "aged" is somewhat repetitive. Please seek alternatives for it here and there.
     • Mixed it up.
   • A date for the Sith-Imperial War in the bio, please.
     • Added :). Grunny ^(Talk) 03:32, 3 April 2009 (UTC)
   • Graestan^(Talk) 19:22, 2 April 2009 (UTC)
2. From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
   • Similar to Grae's first objection, "trained" and "training" seems a bit repetitive. Some synonyms would be nice.
     • Mixed it up :).
   • Nothing from Legacy 0 or 0 1/2?
     • He isn't mentioned in either of them unfortunately.
   • A bit of context for the Sith-Imperial War is needed.
     • Contextified.
   • You should mention in the intro that Talon cared for and respected him.
     • Added.
   • "Seven years after Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Krayt deposed Galactic Emperor Roan Fel and established his Sith Empire at the end of the war..." What war?
     • Addressed.
   • Also, place of death needed in infobox.
     • Done.
   • Nice job, Grunny. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 20:01, 2 April 2009 (UTC)
     • Thanks, Tranner :-). Grunny ^(Talk) 03:32, 3 April 2009 (UTC)
3. You mention in the quote and the PT that Ruyn trained other apprentices; this should be reflected in the bio before talking about Talon's training. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 14:53, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
   • Mentioned :-). Grunny ^(Talk) 15:29, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
     • I added a mention to the intro as well. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 01:03, 5 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:27, 10 April 2009 (UTC)