Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Dakar

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Dakar

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 04:25, December 22, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: About 600 words or so.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Hello and welcome to Wookieepedia. I am Mister Dog-face.--Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 04:50, December 22, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:41, December 24, 2011 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 20:07, December 27, 2011 (UTC)
  4. Nice one. ~SavageBOB sig 04:39, December 28, 2011 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:36, December 30, 2011 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Menkooroo 02:59, January 2, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Cal Jedi
  • A couple of infobox exclusive things.
    • Fixed.
  • {{1st}} template, or whatever is appropriate, is needed.
    • Added.
  • Otherwise, a good looking article.--Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 04:37, December 22, 2011 (UTC)
Lee's charge
  • A mention of his species or at least his gender would be good in the intro.
    • Added a mention of his gender.
  • Also, shouldn't we use "Unidentified" in IU articles? That's the case in the infobox.
    • Not really, it's kind of OOU phrasing. At least from past experience though, it's OK to use in the infobox.
  • Maybe mention his enormous teeths in the P&T.
    • Fixed.
  • Good work. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:20, December 23, 2011 (UTC)
Moffship
  • Perhaps you could split the bio into two or more paragraphs?
    • Done.
  • "Sunrider punched her ship's escape pod..." - I understand what you're saying here, but I feel you should make it clearer that she actually used the escape pod to flee. (Otherwise, I can't help but laugh at the image of Vima punching her escape pod in frustration. :p )
    • Changed. How does it look now?
  • That's all. Good work, Floyd. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 18:04, December 26, 2011 (UTC)
Prepare to be savaged…
  • Just one thing, really: Since you call out Doneeta as a Twi'lek, it might be best to call out Hoggon and Sunrider as Humans. Or, drop the Twi'lek designator. I'd lean toward the former, but either should be OK. ~SavageBOB sig 15:55, December 27, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:10, January 2, 2012 (UTC)