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DE-10 blaster pistol

  • Nominated by: OLIOSTER (talk) 07:09, August 24, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My contribution to the barn burner.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 14:31, August 25, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Talrrivanian JaingHead (Headquarters)
  3. ACvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 00:25, September 3, 2011 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Kilson(Let's have a chat) 16:45, September 3, 2011 (UTC)
  5. ~SavageBOB sig 22:53, September 4, 2011 (UTC)
  6. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 05:20, September 5, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Talrrivanian
  • Both in the intro and the history sections, you state very clearly that there is one spacer. But then you switch to plural tense, see these sentences for the examples.
  • When a spacer infiltrated the Death Watch bunker on Endor, they discovered a schematic for the weapon and specialized barrels used in its construction, to which they eventually had one of the weapon(there is no "s" here when there should be) created for themselves. In the intro.
  • When a spacer infiltrated the bunker located, they discovered the weapon's schematics and the specialized parts. The spacer eventually had one of the weapons constructed for their own use. In the history section. Bold words represent my point with the problem.
    • The spacer's sex and species is decided by the player and are not canonically known so something that doesn't imply gender had to be used, hence "they". OLIOSTER (talk) 02:10, August 25, 2011 (UTC)
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Kilson
  • Correct me if I'm wrong, but didn't we decide not to use the pronoun "they" when describing the "unidentified spacer?" I may be mistaken about this though.
  • Due to a recent CT, we have decided not to fill in the "Owners" field of the Infobox for general weapon types, such as the DE-10. You need to correct that field accordingly.
  • We don't have a definite LG for weapon articles, but the most common layout is a "Description" section followed by a "History" section. You should correct this article accordingly.
  • In the Intro and History section, you should insert the generic "Sometime after the Battle of Yavin" when you describe when the spacer infiltrated the Death Watch bunker.
  • You also need to insert a 100% game completion tag when you mention the spacer in the History section.
  • "OR-5's DE-10" may deserve an article if it truly was a specialized version. Also, could you go into more detail describing how OR-5's DE-10 was specialized compared to other DE-10.
  • Possibly more to come after this. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 18:42, August 28, 2011 (UTC)
    • All addressed but a point on OR-5's version. I made the article but "specialized version" was probably not the best term. The only difference between them is that OR=5's version is restricted to the Spy profession. OLIOSTER (talk) 05:11, August 29, 2011 (UTC)
Moffship
  • Please reword the first sentence of the intro to bold "DE-10 blaster pistol," not just "DE-10."
  • "...the sentient discovered a schematic for the weapon and specialized barrels used in its construction..." - Did the spacer discover barrels or schematics for the barrels? Judging from the body it's the former, but it could use some clarification here.
  • "...to which the traveler eventually had one of the weapon created for themselves." - I'm not exactly sure what you're trying to say here.
    • Made it its own sentence to clarify. OLIOSTER (talk) 00:07, September 3, 2011 (UTC)
  • Is the spacer tasked with infiltrating the bunker to find the schematics and parts, or does one just stumble across them while exploring?
    • No specific task, the schematic and the barrels used to make it are just some of the random loot you can find in the bunker. OLIOSTER (talk) 00:07, September 3, 2011 (UTC)
      • The reason I ask is because the current wording seems to imply that he was hired to recover the schematics and the barrels. Perhaps instead of "located," "found" would be better? Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 00:18, September 3, 2011 (UTC)
  • While I reworded them somewhat already, the last two sentences of the BTS could be reworded to improve the flow.
    • Tried. See how it works. OLIOSTER (talk) 00:07, September 3, 2011 (UTC)
  • That's all for now. Good job. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 21:02, September 2, 2011 (UTC)
Prepare to be savaged…
  • "infiltrated the Death Watch bunker"... Did they have only one? If so, maybe add some context on it as a unique location; if they had several, change "the" to "a"?
    • It is their main and only base on the moon. How would you suggest signifying it was unique? OLIOSTER (talk) 20:28, September 4, 2011 (UTC)
      • Just like that! :) "the Death Watch bunker, their base of operations on the moon" or somesuch? ~SavageBOB sig 20:57, September 4, 2011 (UTC)
  • Can you reword the first paragraph of "History" a bit more? It almost replicates the lead verbatim in places, so a bit of reshuffling would be good.
  • Context is needed on HK-47. That's all! ~SavageBOB sig 14:17, September 4, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 05:20, September 5, 2011 (UTC)


  • Formerly a CA nomination. It can be viewed here. OLIOSTER (talk) 07:09, August 24, 2011 (UTC)
  • According to the SWG Wiki, there's also version of the pistol called "OR-5's DE-10" that can be looted from Colonel OR-5 in the Droid factory instance. --Craven 15:12, August 27, 2011 (UTC)
    • Always missing something. Added. OLIOSTER (talk) 00:10, August 28, 2011 (UTC)