Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Confederacy of Corporate Systems

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Confederacy of Corporate Systems

• Nominated by: Erebus Chronus Open frequency 19:08, June 20, 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

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Support

1. Well done on your first GAN! Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 15:19, June 24, 2020 (UTC)
2. Great work! - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 16:28, June 24, 2020 (UTC)
3. Welcome to the GAN! MasterFredcerique 22:17, July 21, 2020 (UTC)
4. Imperators II^(Talk) 10:07, August 30, 2020 (UTC)
5. Tommy-Macaroni 10:40, August 30, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Ratts

• The first history paragraph is dominated by a large run-on sentence. You need to break it up so that it's easier for the reader to follow.
  • Sentence has been reduced. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 03:51, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
    • " She thought it might also be…" You should be more explicit in what "it" is. RattsT (talk) 03:59, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
      • Done. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 04:19, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
• Mothma should be introduced in the paragraph before mentioning her arm and hand. RattsT (talk) 02:55, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • Done. Would you like me to go more in depth on her meeting with the senators? Erebus Chronus Open frequency 03:51, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
    • Does the meeting have anything to do with the Confederacy? If not, then it's not necessary. RattsT (talk) 03:59, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
      • The meeting has to do with redistributing resources from the Empire. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 04:19, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
        • Then yeah, no need to go into it. RattsT (talk) 04:38, June 21, 2020 (UTC)

Braha'tok enthusiast

• Avoid the use of currently, per this. Something on the lines of "…at that time." would work better. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 15:55, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • Done. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 16:25, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
• Nakadia needs context. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 16:37, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • Done. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 17:07, June 21, 2020 (UTC)

OOM

• Release date and corresponding reference could be given for Aftermath: Empire's End.
  • Sorry to interject, but Aftermath is a book trilogy so this only needs a year date. See here. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 16:57, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
• Context for the other new organizations in relation to the Confederacy could be provided in the main body. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 16:44, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • Done. However, both the New Separatist Union and the Confederacy of Corporate Systems use the exact same information as one another so what should I say? Erebus Chronus Open frequency 17:05, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
    • Something along the lines of "another growing galactic government" would do. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 17:39, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
      • Done. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 17:59, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
• (Reviewing note) Confederacy is a disambiguation page. There is no need to link to the page in an in-universe section of the article. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 17:39, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
• A few of the pronouns need to be specified to the individual they're referring to. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 07:14, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
  • Done. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 07:47, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
    • The two sentences after Eleodie Maracavanya. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 15:47, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
      • Done. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 15:51, June 23, 2020 (UTC)
• Last one: you could vary the use of "during" and "New Republic" in the article's body. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 15:51, June 24, 2020 (UTC)
  • Done. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 16:25, June 24, 2020 (UTC)

Fred strikes back

• Welcome to the GAN! First off, quotes. The attribution for the main quote doesn't really show how the quote is related to the Confederacy. Could you maybe change it so that it's more obvious? Also, is there no quote that can be used for the body?
  • Done. However, the main quote is the only relevant one for the Confederacy in Aftermath. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 16:02, July 21, 2020 (UTC)
• The second sentence of "History" is quite long. Try splitting it up into at least two, maybe three sentences.
  • Done. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 16:02, July 21, 2020 (UTC)
• See my change here and let me know if you have any issues or questions. MasterFredcerique 05:39, July 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • That's fine. Erebus Chronus Open frequency 20:39, July 21, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 10:40, August 30, 2020 (UTC)