Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Chagrian colony

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Chagrian colony

• Nominated by: Cade Calrayn 14:43, March 7, 2013 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Project Hero

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 02:18, March 11, 2013 (UTC)
2. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:56, March 14, 2013 (UTC)
3. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 11:33, March 20, 2013 (UTC)
4. DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 00:20, March 22, 2013 (UTC)
5. Cade pls y u doulbe-link year? MasterFred^(Whatever) 00:40, March 22, 2013 (UTC)

Object

• "However, in the year 3,651 BBY..." Is this really a "however"? It doesn't seem to run together with the previous sentence. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 05:33, March 10, 2013 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Cade Calrayn 15:49, March 10, 2013 (UTC)

Toprawa

• The beginning of this sentence is a dangling modifier. This is literally saying "the colonists on the Inner Rim planet Mindor were a colony of Chagrians," which kind of doesn't make sense. "A colony of the Chagrian species, the colonists on the Inner Rim planet Mindor was extremely devoted..." Secondly, "the colonists on the Inner Rim planet Mindor was extremely devoted to..." Were extremely devoted to? Please rewrite this sentence. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:24, March 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 21:09, March 13, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:40, March 22, 2013 (UTC)