Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Bron Burs's species

Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi ( talk ) 21:23, June 28, 2013 (UTC)
Nomination comments: For WP:ALIENS .

The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Bron Burs's species

"Their anatomy consisted of a head and torso, eyes on the top of their heads, horny spines on the back of their faces, and a beaklike nose, which had an opening for the mouth, the nostrils of which were between their eyes." This sentence could use to be split as it is rather long. It also makes it sound like the nostrils were part of the mouth.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 02:52, July 6, 2013 (UTC)
- Changed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:12, July 6, 2013 (UTC)

A certain sentient species - I'm really not happy with the use of "certain" here. When used in speech, such as "a certain someone told me", the inference is that the speaker and the listener both known said individual, but do not want to divulge the name in public. Its usage here implies similar, expect we don't know the species.
- Changed.
~~Skin colour - tell me I'm not going colour blind because I'm seeing it as green, and so are others in a quick IRC consensus.~~ - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 18:20, July 8, 2013 (UTC)
- Wow, failure. I think I just failed to think for myself and just went with whatever was already written about the color. It indeed appears more green, and I changed it. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 22:42, July 8, 2013 (UTC)

~~There is no mention at all of the two tuskish things that are on the front of his face by the mouth. Otherwise, good work.~~ 501st dogma^(talk) 12:19, July 14, 2013 (UTC)
- Done. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 14:58, July 14, 2013 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 17:03, July 16, 2013 (UTC)