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Brel Ti Vorne

  • Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 01:48, April 17, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Webcomic's been stalled since December 2019, and not liable to start anytime soon, seemingly, and so this should be stable enough with how far out he'd be in it.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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Support

  1. ACvote Tommy-Macaroni 10:38, May 15, 2020 (UTC)
  2. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 04:54, May 18, 2020 (UTC)
  3. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 09:00, May 18, 2020 (UTC)
  4. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 18:25, May 19, 2020 (UTC)
  5. ACvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 18:55, May 20, 2020 (UTC)

Object

UberSoldat
  • "Organa had been optimistic that the supplies she had brought would improve the working conditions in the mine, and did not understand the group's apathetic reaction to it." Could you elaborate more on what "it" is referring to in this context? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 09:32, April 27, 2020 (UTC)
Tommy
  • I think it'd be good to give some context to spice.
  • "Ti Vorne greeted the royals, expressing his gratitude for their visit as Organa explained that she had brought crates of mining equipment for the mine's workers as her relief mission to Onoam.[2]" - I think this is a bit of a run-on, maybe split it?
  • Panaka's page says he was moff of Naboo's sector, which I think may be notable to mention, to show he had to power to make some difference at the mine.
  • I think it'd be best to split the intro into two paragraphs, and for an article of this length add a little more info. Maybe that he was disheartened with the situation and sought outside help? Tommy-Macaroni 18:45, May 9, 2020 (UTC)
    • Split. If I still need to tuck in another sentence or so as well, can probably make it work.—spookywillowwtalk 03:15, May 15, 2020 (UTC)
      • I think that's probably a good length. Tommy-Macaroni 10:38, May 15, 2020 (UTC)
Ecks
  • Just one minor thing: I believe "Moff" is one of those rare titles that are always capitalized (like Jedi titles, for example); I don't think I've ever seen it not capitalized. What does the source say? 1358 (Talk) 07:01, May 17, 2020 (UTC)
    • When attaching his name to it - "That's—Moff Quarsh Panaka, yes?" "Moff Panaka's office...". However, with his name not attached, "Leia wondered whether the moff's underlings..." "...climbed the steps leading to the moff's chalet..." Seems to be consistent in it's capitalization usage in other spots, as well.—spookywillowwtalk 03:56, May 18, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:55, May 20, 2020 (UTC)