- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Braha'tok
- Nominated by:Kilson Likes PIE 21:35, 09 May 09 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:Mad props to my homie Ello 137 for fixing up this ride on What's the Story. What the hell did I just say! :P
(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)
Support
Objections hashed out in IRC. CC7567 (talk) 03:54, 10 May 2009 (UTC)- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 05:50, 12 May 2009 (UTC)
- Per IRC review. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jujiggum) 23:19, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
- Master JonathanJedi Council Chambers 03:27, 24 May 2009 (UTC)
Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 15:14, 25 May 2009 (UTC)
Grunny (Talk) 09:55, 29 May 2009 (UTC)- IFYLOFD (You will pay the price for your lack of vision!) 21:25, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
Object
- IFYLOFD attacks your nom:
"and was subsequently caught in a trap that had been devised by Emperor Palpatine." Subsequently? Weren't they already caught in a trap?"Originally, Ello 137 the Braha'tok's name as a mythical Dornean name," Fix.Why wouldn't Ello be able to fit the name in?Ello just says that he couldn't fit the mythical name into the "flow" of the story.
Could use a copyedit for grammar and spelling. I've fixed what I've seen, but you should go over it for good measure.- Other than that, a fine job. IFYLOFD (You will pay the price for your lack of vision!) 01:15, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
- I addressed your other objections, thanks for the review. Kilson Likes PIE 02:42, 10 May 09 (UTC)
- Soresu never bothers to say anything amusing here
The Braha'tok was a Braha'tok-class gunship in the Dornean Navy under the command of Kiles L'toth. Unclear as to whether L'toth commands the ship or the fleet.You should probably state in the History that they didn't know that the Death Star was functional.SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 09:13, 10 May 2009 (UTC)- I addressed both objections, thanks for the review. Kilson Likes PIE 19:39, 10 May 09 (UTC)
- From the Council Chambers:
- Not an objection, but a note for the future: Infobox references should be placed within the {{Ref}} template. I fixed it here, but you'll want to remember this in the future. OK, here we go:
"but the Braha'tok and the Tokatarak were able to destroy the Eminence after the latter attacked the Imperial warship from behind." I think "latter" is meant to refer to the Tokatarak, but as used here, it technically and incorrectly refers to the Eminence.What is the name of the user that did the What's the Story entry? He is variously referred to as "Ellos 137", "Ello 137", and "Ello137", all in the space of one paragraph in the Bts.Also, after clearing up the previous objection, please redlink the first mention of his screen name—anyone who contributes to canon should have an article, even if only known by a screen name. See Category:What's The Story? authors.- Nice job. Master JonathanJedi Council Chambers 01:36, 24 May 2009 (UTC)
- Objections addressed after short IRC discussion. Master JonathanJedi Council Chambers 03:27, 24 May 2009 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:20, 29 May 2009 (UTC)