- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Blaschowwa
- Nominated by: Jinzler 17:29, April 22, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A Sithspawn Wookiee
(4 ACs/0 Users/4 Total)
Support
Kilson(Let's have a chat) 19:59, April 24, 2011 (UTC)- Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 21:36, April 25, 2011 (UTC) 
Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:51, April 29, 2011 (UTC)- 1358 (Talk) 22:40, April 29, 2011 (UTC)
- Approved by Karohalva 21:28, April 30, 2011 (UTC)
Object
YAY more Wookiees!
In the Intro, "Blaschowwa encountered a group of New Republic agents that had came to the temple in search of Rystra." After reading what you said in the Bio, I would alter the sentence to say how Blackowwa attacked and was defeated by the agents.- Done Jinzler 10:22, April 24, 2011 (UTC)
I never played the RPG this article is from, but is it possible to kill Blaschowwa in the game? If so, you should mention it in the Bts.- The adventure doesn't specify his ultimate fate, leaving it open-ended. Generally I prefer not to speculate in such circumstances, but given that death is such a probable outcome here, I have now mentioned that possibility in the BTS. --Jinzler 10:22, April 24, 2011 (UTC)
- Otherwise, nice job. Good to see the Wookiees plague is spreading. :p Kilson(Let's have a chat) 20:31, April 22, 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you for your very prompt review. --Jinzler 10:22, April 24, 2011 (UTC)
Moffship
I think a note on Rystra's fate, if known, would be appropriate.Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 00:51, April 25, 2011 (UTC)
- I've mentioned that they eventually engage Rystra in combat. The outcome of their fight with Rystra is uncertain, as the players can defeat him, but it is also possible for Rystra to win. I don't want to over-complicate things by going either way and stating his final fate, which would therefore necessitate stating the alternate fate in a note or the BTS, but I can if you think it would be better for the article. Thanks for your review. --Jinzler 21:29, April 25, 2011 (UTC)
- That's all I was looking for. Good work. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 21:36, April 25, 2011 (UTC)
- That's all I was looking for. Good work. Grand Moff Tranner
- I've mentioned that they eventually engage Rystra in combat. The outcome of their fight with Rystra is uncertain, as the players can defeat him, but it is also possible for Rystra to win. I don't want to over-complicate things by going either way and stating his final fate, which would therefore necessitate stating the alternate fate in a note or the BTS, but I can if you think it would be better for the article. Thanks for your review. --Jinzler 21:29, April 25, 2011 (UTC)
Padding
"As a result, he became interested only in killing other individuals..." I'm sorry to threaten the word-count, but this seems to me overly bloated. "As a result, he became homicidal..." is more succinct.Karohalva 22:51, April 29, 2011 (UTC)- That is indeed more succinct, but it distorts the meaning of the sentence. The key word here is "only" because killing other individuals became his only desire. Simply using the word "homocidal" reveals that he wanted to kill people, but does not clarify that that was all that he wanted to do. Therefore, I would prefer to keep the current wording, unless you can come up with a proposal for rewording the sentence in a way that does not reduce the current meaning. --Jinzler 23:34, April 29, 2011 (UTC)
- Three options come to mind. (1) "As a result, he became obsessively homicidal..." and (2) "As a result, he became immutably homicidal..." and then for fun (3) "As a result, he became obsessively, invariably, immutably homicidal, a veritable butcher, dwelling exclusively on and eternally yearning for another kill to slake the pathological lust for inflicting death that so ardently raged within his corrupted soul..." Wassail! Karohalva 00:00, April 30, 2011 (UTC)
- I still don't think I can use any of those options. While they are more accurate than your original proposal, they still fail to convey that killing was the only thing that he wanted to do. For example, someone who is "obsessively homocidal" may still be interested in doing other things in addition to murder. --Jinzler 09:56, April 30, 2011 (UTC)
- Three options come to mind. (1) "As a result, he became obsessively homicidal..." and (2) "As a result, he became immutably homicidal..." and then for fun (3) "As a result, he became obsessively, invariably, immutably homicidal, a veritable butcher, dwelling exclusively on and eternally yearning for another kill to slake the pathological lust for inflicting death that so ardently raged within his corrupted soul..." Wassail! Karohalva 00:00, April 30, 2011 (UTC)
- That is indeed more succinct, but it distorts the meaning of the sentence. The key word here is "only" because killing other individuals became his only desire. Simply using the word "homocidal" reveals that he wanted to kill people, but does not clarify that that was all that he wanted to do. Therefore, I would prefer to keep the current wording, unless you can come up with a proposal for rewording the sentence in a way that does not reduce the current meaning. --Jinzler 23:34, April 29, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
No suitable quotes are available. --Jinzler 17:29, April 22, 2011 (UTC)
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:32, April 30, 2011 (UTC)