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Birthday cake
- Nominated by: JediMasterMacaroni
(Talk) 01:09, 7 July 2021 (UTC) - Nomination comments: Yes, you read that right. Birthday cake.
- WookieeProject (optional): WP:EWOKS, WP:NOVELS
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Support
- I just want an excuse to link this Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:03, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
- Dentface (talk) 17:20, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
- I know it doesn’t need another user vote, but after reading the great article and being today my birthday, I couldn't not support it! Great work! LucaRoR (Talk) 16:25, 12 August 2021 (UTC)
Imperators II(Talk) 17:59, 18 August 2021 (UTC)- Not managed to find any other sources. Good work! Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:56, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
Nice work. Watch out for duplicate links though. Tommy-Macaroni 19:12, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
Object
CC-8
Do none of the other appearances listed in birthday have such cake in them?Commander Code-8 Hello There! 11:06, 7 July 2021 (UTC)- Found a couple more sources to update with, that should be it. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 22:55, 12 July 2021 (UTC)
- Found a couple more sources to update with, that should be it. JediMasterMacaroni
I feel like another source might be needed to confirm that High Galactic Writing corresponds to written English, but I'm not sure if it's totally warranted because I know we wouldn't do the same for Aurebesh.- Yeah, I'm not sure that's completely necessary.
The round appearance is infobox exclusive- Added.
"might be found" by who?Commander Code-8 Hello There! 13:15, 13 July 2021 (UTC)- Added.
Also I just read through Lunch Break and I'd say it definitely falls under the intentionally hilarious clause of the Tales canon policy.Commander Code-8 Hello There! 13:20, 13 July 2021 (UTC)- Moved to bts. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 03:18, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
- Moved to bts. JediMasterMacaroni
Given that berries are given as an ingredient in the infobox they should probably be mentioned in the description. The fact that they could be decorated with frosting should go there too.- Both added.
Last pedantic thing; Each of your Bts sentences start the same way, should have some variance.- Fixed.
You've got a spot in the Bts that says "was is," I would fix this but both phrases would be okay and I'm not sure which one you intended.Commander Code-8 Hello There! 14:53, 15 July 2021 (UTC)- A typo, fixed. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 16:10, 15 July 2021 (UTC)
- A typo, fixed. JediMasterMacaroni
Amazingly
Add a 1st or 1stm. AmazinglyCool (talk) 03:52, 9 July 2021 (UTC)- Left over from when it was unclear where it first appeared, fixed. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:35, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- Left over from when it was unclear where it first appeared, fixed. JediMasterMacaroni
Ayrehead
There's room in the BTS for the comic cover image if it's available.Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:34, 7 August 2021 (UTC)- Added.
I think you can go into a bit more detail describing the two different cakes from the Ewoks sources since I think it's worth highlighting how much different birthday cakes can vary in appearance.Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:34, 7 August 2021 (UTC)- Added some more details.
In the instances where you describe Birthday cake as "a cake" I'd change it to a type of cake.Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:34, 7 August 2021 (UTC)- Done.
I'd also reword "served at a birthday" to something like "during birthday celebrations" or something similar as it currently sounds a little awkward.Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:34, 7 August 2021 (UTC)- Done. Thanks for the review. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 03:50, 8 August 2021 (UTC)
I hate to be the bearer of bad news, but Whatlinkshere shows that birthday cake appeared somewhere in Star Wars Galaxies.Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:12, 8 August 2021 (UTC)- Messaged Starsider, hopefully it's nothing too major. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 20:11, 8 August 2021 (UTC)
- Turns out it’s just a cut appearance, I’ve added it to the bts. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:07, 9 August 2021 (UTC)
- Messaged Starsider, hopefully it's nothing too major. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 20:11, 8 August 2021 (UTC)
Have you checked all the sources in WhatlinksHere for Birthday? I'm seeing quite a few not listed on the page like Quick Locations, Roll of the Dice, 1995 Topps Star Wars Galaxy Series 3 etc.Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:15, 10 August 2021 (UTC)- I've checked all of those now and there's nothing new. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 20:52, 11 August 2021 (UTC)
Imp
Can you tell me on which page number in The Essential Atlas does it mention Carcel, let alone establish it as planet?It was my understanding that double quote usage in the title of works is reserved for those cases where said work is a part of a larger collection, like in short story collections. Are you aware of status article precedent where the quotes are used otherwise?Imperators II(Talk) 15:47, 16 August 2021 (UTC)Article for laserfile pls :P- Done, though we know nothing about it :P
One thing you should avoid is your paragraphs sort of becoming what's called a "proseline", i.e., prose that becomes similar in form to a timeline. In this case, you should try and rework some of the paragraphs so that they don't all begin with a time clause.Imperators II(Talk) 21:44, 16 August 2021 (UTC)- Reworked one of them, is that any better? I think it would make the sentence quite awkward if I modified the one from the novel. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 23:46, 16 August 2021 (UTC)
More context for the Millennium Falcon mention. It currently says that the mention was made "jokingly". Did a real birthday cake ever exist in that situation? If yes, who made it and whom was it given to? If not, you should elaborate on the circumstances and reasons, if any, for Poste making the joke.Imperators II(Talk) 08:39, 17 August 2021 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:12, 1 September 2021 (UTC)