Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Berrida

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Berrida

• Nominated by: Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:43, September 25, 2015 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Been far too long since I wrote anything. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:43, September 25, 2015 (UTC)

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Reviewed via IRC. Ayrehead02 (talk) 02:54, October 31, 2015 (UTC)
2. Trip391 (talk) 05:52, November 26, 2015 (UTC)
3. ProfessorTofty (talk) 00:58, November 27, 2015 (UTC)
4. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:54, December 16, 2015 (UTC)
5. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 19:39, December 16, 2015 (UTC)
6. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 03:12, December 17, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Trip

• The second sentence of the intro is a bit long. Could you separate it into two parts, with the second one containing what Jacen Solo was offering.
  • Done.
• In the second paragraph of the bio, the sentence that begins with "When Solo inquired" and ends with "Yuuzhan Vong's military" is a bit long as well. Trip391 (talk) 06:08, October 24, 2015 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure how to break this one up without making it wonky. Personally I don't think it's too long, what do you think? Supreme Emperor (talk) 02:53, October 31, 2015 (UTC)
    • It's broken up now. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:54, November 26, 2015 (UTC)

ProfessorTofty

• Unless I'm mistaken, anything linked in the intro also still has to be linked in the body, right? That would include "planet," "Jedi," etc.
  • Done
• Second paragraph of the biography feels a bit long too me - could it perhaps be broken up into two?
  • Broken up.
• Was there any explanation of why Solo chose to contact this particular officer? ProfessorTofty (talk) 01:31, November 7, 2015 (UTC)
  • None at all. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:54, November 26, 2015 (UTC)

Cav

• When Solo inquired as to why Berrida believed the Remnant was attacked, he stated that although the Yuuzhan Vong had issued no explanation, he believed it was in retaliation for assisting the Galactic Alliance, the New Republic's successor government, most recently by sharing information on hyperspace routes into the Deep Core worlds, which allowed the Alliance to ambush a large Yuuzhan Vong fleet in the Treskov system, and kill Warmaster Tsavong Lah, the leader of the Yuuzhan Vong's military. - this is one really long run on sentence. You should break this up for clarity. - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 14:53, November 15, 2015 (UTC)
  • Consider it done. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:54, November 26, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

• Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:12, December 17, 2015 (UTC)