Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Battle of Phaseera

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Battle of Phaseera

• Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 06:09, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Floyd strikes again.

(4 ACs/4 Users/8 Total)

Support

1. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 21:20, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
2. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 13:38, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
3. CC7567 ^(talk) 22:06, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
4. Good work Floyd :) JangFett ^Talk 23:48, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
5. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:33, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
6. --Clone Commander Lee 17:53, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
7. —Master Jonathan^{(Jedi Council Chambers)} 06:24, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
8. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 23:46, 22 August 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. Soresu
   • so if the Sith tried to move troops through the valley the outpost would spot them and signal ahead to the base camp, so their defenses would be up and fully operational before the Sith ever reached them. So is repetitive.
     • Addressed.
   • However, when the Sith commanders ordered the Gloom Walkers to take the outpost during the daytime, the Gloom Walkers objected It seems like the netire squad objected. Maybe if you cahnged it to "a number of Gloom Walkers" or something like that?
     • No, they all were. Path of Destruction describes that they were all shocked.
       • Including Ulabore? Did he object? SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 12:42, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
         • No, he didn't. But that is expounded upon in the next sentence. It is stated that Ulabore didn't reconsider, so obviously he didn't object. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 02:10, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
   • With the outpost taken out, the Republic camp had no idea that the main Sith force were marching through the valley toward them and were taken by surprise, and the Sith took the planet. Doesn't flow well. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 07:55, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
     • Addressed. Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 03:10, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
2. "Due to a seemingly impossible display of shooting by Dessel..." This is confusing. It isn't clear why his shooting was impossible, or even whether or not it was good shooting. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 15:07, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
   • Addressed. Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 03:10, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
3. From the Council Chambers:
   • "The battle" section focuses solely on the Gloom Walkers' mission, and then glosses over the rest of the battle with "The Republic forces were taken by surprise, and the Sith took the planet." Is it possible to expand on this or is the information simply not available?
     • There's really no other information. The book focuses solely on the Gloom Walkers' mission.
   • And that's it. Great job. —Master Jonathan^{(Jedi Council Chambers)} 02:04, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
     • Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 05:05, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:04, 23 August 2009 (UTC)

• Added {{GAnom}} tag. --Clone Commander Lee 06:33, 26 July 2009 (UTC)