- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Battle of Dorin
- Nominated by: CC7567 (talk) 19:47, April 2, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Little Battle #1, complement to the big one.
(5 ACs/3 Users/8 Total)
Support
- SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 06:00, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
- Jawaman Speak softly, and drive a big tank. 11:38, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:44, April 3, 2010 (UTC)- Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:26, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
- Spotless. Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 23:16, April 3, 2010 (UTC) - Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:50, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
- Jonjedigrandmaster (We seed the stars) 19:22, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
- Cylka-talk- 22:01, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
Object
- Soresu
Just one: However, while on a retreat with Senator Rush Clovis of the InterGalactic Banking Clan delegation at Trade Federation Senator Lott Dod's palace on Cato Neimoidia, Senator Padmé Amidala of the Galactic Republic discovered and obtained a disk containing tactical coordinates for the droid foundry. A rather long and confusing sentence. I don't feel that both the reason and location of the retreat are needed for its purposes as context for the battle. One should do.SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 21:44, April 2, 2010 (UTC)- I have to disagree here; the sentence is completely fine in English (it isn't a run-on), and I don't find that any less amount of facts would be appropriate. Thanks for the review. CC7567 (talk) 03:16, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
- Hmm. It sounds fine when I re-read it. I'll defer to your experience here, but IMO, obtaining the data is the only thing that's relevant to the battle itself, and I don't feel that it needs two sets of context. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 06:00, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
- I have to disagree here; the sentence is completely fine in English (it isn't a run-on), and I don't find that any less amount of facts would be appropriate. Thanks for the review. CC7567 (talk) 03:16, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
I think Plo Koon also participated in the battle, because Yoda said to Skywalker and Koon to met at Geonosis after going to Dorin.Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:59, April 7, 2010 (UTC)- The line is: Kenobi, with you shall go Master Mundi and Master Luminara. Skywalker and Master Plo Koon shall aid you, if successful on Dorin they are. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:02, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
- Added. Thank you for catching that. CC7567 (talk) 18:57, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
- Anytime, CC. Clone Commander Lee Talk 19:01, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
- Added. Thank you for catching that. CC7567 (talk) 18:57, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
- The line is: Kenobi, with you shall go Master Mundi and Master Luminara. Skywalker and Master Plo Koon shall aid you, if successful on Dorin they are. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:02, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:01, April 8, 2010 (UTC)