Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Bannidge Holt

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Bannidge Holt

• Nominated by: Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:07, January 23, 2019 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Nice work. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 04:24, January 27, 2019 (UTC)
2. Fan26 (Talk) 19:46, January 27, 2019 (UTC)
3. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 11:58, January 29, 2019 (UTC)
4. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:27, February 14, 2019 (UTC)
5. Tommy Macaroni 21:24, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
6. MasterFred^(Whatever) 00:05, February 20, 2019 (UTC)

Object

QGJ

• Bio can be split into two subsections. Second and third paragraphs can also be split; they are a bit too long in the Oasis skin.
  • Done. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 16:39, January 28, 2019 (UTC)
• Intro: Did this happen during the previously mentioned Western Reaches Operation or was this an unrelated event? It's currently unclear. Holt was killed when he and General Hurst Romodi were ambushed by Iska pirates at Bryndar
  • Clarified. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 16:39, January 28, 2019 (UTC)
• Context missing for planets: Zygerria, Terviss, Bryndar.
  • Added. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 16:39, January 28, 2019 (UTC)
    • Something along the lines of "the planet Zygerria", "the world of Terviss" (instead of just "Zygerria" or "Terviss") would have sufficed. What you've added might be a bit excessive, but I don't mind. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 11:58, January 29, 2019 (UTC)
• Which Rim are we talking about? You previously mentioned both the Mid Rim and the Outer Rim. Tarkin requested significant military resources, including numerous veterans of previous campaigns in the Rim. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 13:13, January 28, 2019 (UTC)
  • Both. The source material uses "the Rim" throughout to refer to these campaigns. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 16:39, January 28, 2019 (UTC)

Toprawa

• What is the basis for treating Fry's Tumblr endnotes as canon? Are they the same as the Warfare Author's Cut entries on StarWars.com, which were released through that official outlet and therefore considered canon? If not, author notes are not automatically considered official unless we have some indication of their approval by Leland Chee or someone. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:22, February 9, 2019 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 22:28, February 11, 2019 (UTC)
• It would be better to avoid the repetitious wording here: "Bannidge Holt was a member of the Holt family,[1] a prestigious family..." I'm assuming you were trying to avoid extra reference notes, since "prestigious" presumably can't be sourced to EGW, for example. You might just need to play around with the referencing. I would suggest writing it as "Bannidge Holt was a member of the prestigious Holt family, which hailed from the fortress world Anaxes, in the Core Worlds, and had a long history of naval service." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:11, February 14, 2019 (UTC)
  • Changed the second "family" to "household" since figuring out the referencing any other way was giving me a headache. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:44, February 14, 2019 (UTC)

Fred strikes back

• "...in the region of the Corporate Sector." In what region? MasterFred^(Whatever) 02:34, February 15, 2019 (UTC)
  • The Corporate Sector is a region. Reworded for clarity. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:23, February 19, 2019 (UTC)

Tommy

• Could you mention some of the P&T info in the intro please.
  • Some of it already was, but I've added a bit more. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:16, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
• I think you could link to the Western Reaches Operation a little earlier in the body. Tommy Macaroni 10:04, February 19, 2019 (UTC)
  • Done. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:16, February 19, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:05, February 20, 2019 (UTC)