Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Attack on the Trade Federation outpost

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Attack on the Trade Federation outpost

(3 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 11:13, December 16, 2019 (UTC)
  2. LordMominutiae (talk) 03:11, January 17, 2020 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 17:50, January 18, 2020 (UTC)
  4. ACvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 05:19, January 20, 2020 (UTC)
  5. UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:33, January 20, 2020 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:18, January 20, 2020 (UTC)

Object

QGJ
  • Please provide the timeframe for the event in the intro.
  • This has some POV issues. Hoping to intimidate the cowardly Trade Federation
  • Please cut down on the level of detail in the prelude. It is disproportionally long, compared to the actual battle, which should be the focus of the article. This has been a recurring problem with your nominations from my experience, please pay closer attention to this. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 11:50, December 2, 2019 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the reviews. I've worked on the others but I only picked up on the POV issue you highlighted so let me know what I'm missing. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 07:57, December 3, 2019 (UTC)
  • I'd like to see some clarification that GWC-04 commanded the battle droids remotely and was not physically present during the battle.
  • I think that the term "bowcaster trooper" is fairly self-explanatory and does not require additional context. It only makes the sentence more unwieldy These included bowcaster troopers, infantry soldiers who wielded bowcaster projectile weapons,
  • The Bts should just be reworded to be entirely in present tense at this point. Currently, this glaring tense shift really stands out. The strategy guide portrayed some aspects of the battle[3] differently from the finished game,[1] stating that several battle droids would attack the player on the path to the camp and that more droids would be spawned from the troop center to attack the player. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:16, December 6, 2019 (UTC)
Tommy
  • Is the more suitable title for this article "Attack on the Trade Federation outpost" or "Attack on the Trade Federation troop center"? Please standardise your usage in the article.
  • I think you should mention the presence of the Jinn in the intro.
  • Context for GWC-04 please.
  • Do you think the Wookiee medical droid is notable to be added to strength in the infobox?
  • Considering the differing information between sources, I think the BTS should say which the article assumes to be correct. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 13:04, January 12, 2020 (UTC)
    • All done, realised it made more sense to assume the game was the correct portrayal, I will update the main image with the correct numbers when I've got some more time. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 03:55, January 13, 2020 (UTC)
  • I'm leaving an objection for the image update so neither of us forget.
  • "With a force of twelve, Chewbacca led the attack", "Chewbacca trained a group of eleven other warriors" I assume this is 11 warriors + Chewbacca, but I think the wording of the intro can be modified to avoid confusion. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:41, January 13, 2020 (UTC)
  • The last image shows B1s and a droideka. I'm assuming this is illustrating the aftermath section, but I think this should be mentioned in the caption to avoid confusion. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:15, January 14, 2020 (UTC)
    • Done. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 22:36, January 14, 2020 (UTC)
      • Sorry I was a bit unclear there. I mean mentioning that the image shows events after this battle. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 17:15, January 15, 2020 (UTC)
        • Oh haha. The image is just from the cutscene after winning the level so I just added that the images shows droids after the battle. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 00:53, January 16, 2020 (UTC)
LordMominutiae
  • In the final paragraph of the "Prelude" section, it's said that the Wookiees "assembled a transport repulsorcraft," but the last sentence of that paragraph says the Wookiees "boarded the transport ships." Which vehicle type did they use, and were these other transports assembled at the same time? If not, where did they come from? LordMominutiae (talk) 01:36, January 16, 2020 (UTC)
    • That should be a bit clearer, turned out there is an article for the Wookiee transport ships used in the game. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 02:46, January 17, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:34, January 20, 2020 (UTC)