Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Attack on the Paataatus

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Attack on the Paataatus

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Support

  1. 01miki10 Open comlink 19:56, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
  2. Editoronthewiki (talk) 20:49, 25 September 2021 (UTC)
  3. ACvote MasterFredCommerce Guild(talk) 07:14, 7 December 2021 (UTC)

Object

01miki10
Ecks Dee
  • The article needs to be properly sectioned in accordance with the "Battle, mission, and duel articles" section of the Layout Guide. 1358 (Talk) 18:13, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
  • You can definitely sneak in at least two relevant images in the body. 1358 (Talk) 09:07, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
  • No relevant quotes for Prelude and The attack? 1358 (Talk) 20:03, 4 September 2021 (UTC)
Luca
  • I might be wrong, but I think the intro is too long compared to the body. LucaRoR (Talk) 19:00, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Hmm, well, I just removed an unnecessary paragraph from the intro. How is it now? -- YakovChaimTzvi ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol (talk) 19:07, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • The date template states that Chaos Rising takes place "around" 19 BBY, contradicting what is stated in this article.
    • Took care of this in this article. Unfortunately, that’s going to cause a major chain of updates of 19 BBY to c. 19 BBY in a lot of Chaos Rising articles. — YakovChaimTzvi ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol (talk) 03:41, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
  • Many subjects need context in the body upon their first mentions, such as Paataatus, Nikardun Destiny, Nikardun, and Dioya.
  • Here's my copy-edit in which I had to add links, fix various issues, and reword some rather informal language, which I'm still seeing in the article. I would advise you to go through it and ensure the content is written with an encyclopedic tone in mind. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 19:43, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
    • Thank you, that copy edit is very helpful. I'll work on the other objections. -- YakovChaimTzvi ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol (talk) 00:00, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
  • Lesser Evil provides some new details on Yiv's attack, thus an update is in order.
  • Not a fan of the two single-paragraph subsections in Aftermath. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 07:50, 20 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Are you done with the info tweaks that we discussed on Discord? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 19:30, 15 December 2021 (UTC)
  • The infobox is currently missing all the other Chiss who participated in the battle, and they should also be mentioned in the body.
  • Context for Thalias.
  • A brief description of what kind of "liberating" they were doing at Nettehi would be nice. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 09:49, 16 December 2021 (UTC)
  • Article is now above 1000 words. Can you specify what "redundant wording" you're referring to here? It might still be useful context, and constantly going through the article again and again just to bring it below the limit is a practice the rules actively discourage. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 09:41, 26 December 2021 (UTC)
Dionne
  • I don't get involved in these things all that often, but I have to ask, where the info in the last sentence of the attack section comes from: "Among all the commanding officers of the Chiss warships, only Thrawn was aware of that critical information."? If I remember correctly Wutroow dug the info about the optimal attack vector from her family, and nowhere they stated that Thrawn knew anything about it.--Dionne Jinn (talk) 06:14, 27 December 2021 (UTC)

Comments

  • The attack is the second half of Chapter Two of Chaos Rising and the aftermath is Chapter Three, for those interested in checking. — YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol (talk) 16:05, 12 November 2021 (UTC)