Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Attack on disabled base

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Attack on disabled base

• Nominated by: Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:45, October 2, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: We've got company!

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Support

Object

Lee attacks

• The Royal Naboo Security Forces were scattered and the citizens were placed in internment camps after the invasion started. Unnecessary.
  • I disagree; it sets the tone for the article and is relevant to the overall situation. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 02:36, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
• For one group of soldiers, however, the battle was just beginning. This does not belong in an article.
  • Re-expressed. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 02:36, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
• Some info about the Invasion of Naboo needed in the prelude section.
  • Added. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 02:36, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
    • Just a little bit more. (Why did they invade Naboo?)
      • Is that enough? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 18:55, October 19, 2010 (UTC)
• More to come. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 15:56, October 2, 2010 (UTC)
  • While I look forward to hearing more, I of course must budget my time. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 18:55, October 19, 2010 (UTC)

Xd1358

• Infobox objections
  • The infobox image needs to be cropped at the top. Looks like it has a black line up there.
    • This objection is getting rather old. Please fix this as soon as possible. 1358 ^(Talk) 19:42, November 19, 2010 (UTC)
      • Should be gone now. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:30, November 20, 2010 (UTC)
  • Outcome field: Use asterisks (*) instead of semicolons.
  • Two links to redirects in the strenght field. (nitpicky, but anyway...)
  • Reason why 'droid starfighter' is capitalized in the strength field?
  • Also, is the base really a "strength"? It really didn't participate in the battle itself.
    • All addressed except cropping. I'll figure it out later. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 01:53, November 10, 2010 (UTC)
• Intro objections
  • The intro starts somewhat strange. Perhaps make it smoother like this: "During the invasion of Naboo, a temporarily disabled TF base was attacked…"?
    • Added per your suggestion. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 01:53, November 10, 2010 (UTC)
  • Two thirds of the intro is a prelude to the battle? More details on the battle, less prelude stuff, please.
    • Details on battle added, but left prelude which directly applies to the battle. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 01:53, November 10, 2010 (UTC)
• I'll reread the intro and continue with the body once you've fixed these. 1358 ^(Talk) 18:02, October 30, 2010 (UTC)
  • I appreciate your advice. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 01:53, November 10, 2010 (UTC)
• Cut down on the introduction. It's way too big at the moment. ~You could probably cut down at least one third of it. 1358 ^(Talk) 12:50, November 30, 2010 (UTC)

Jujiggum's first glance

• Please add an aftermath section.
  • I had removed the section because it was a repetition of the final sentence. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:52, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
    • Per the LG it's required if possible, and in this case it could be very easily done. And it could also very easily present more than just the single sentence to which you refer. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 04:07, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
      • Added. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:13, November 30, 2010 (UTC)
        • Perhaps some more light could be shed here on what Sykes went on to accomplish, as well as the overall outcome of the invasion. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 03:19, November 30, 2010 (UTC)
• Myriad grammatical errors throughout.
  • Not sure what you mean. Nothing is showing up in spell-check. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:52, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
    • I don't like to give out the answers on objections like this because it's not the job of the AC to give you English lessons. You did fix the typos, but more serious issues remain. To name just a couple of the mistakes still remaining: the second sentence of the intro is grammatically incorrect, and the final sentence you mentioned in response to the above objection is written in the incorrect tense. A further word of advice: spell-check isn't perfect. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 04:07, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
      • A few tweaks added. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:13, November 30, 2010 (UTC)
        • You've only fixed the two I specifically pointed out. More remain. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 03:19, November 30, 2010 (UTC)
• More to come. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 15:58, November 28, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

1. As a courtesy, I am informing you I will be taking a break until about the 20th of December. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 20:46, November 30, 2010 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

1. Nominator has announced his departure from the site on a lengthy vacation and concedes the forfeiture of his existing nominations. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:22, November 30, 2010 (UTC)
2. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 00:06, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
3. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 01:31, December 1, 2010 (UTC)