Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Attack on Phelzepham

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Attack on Phelzepham

• Nominated by: Editoronthewiki (talk) 02:20, 10 July 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: I guess you can count this to be a companion piece to Tomo's Ahr nom
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:CO, WP:AMB

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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Support

1. NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 08:42, 26 July 2022 (UTC)
2. UberSoldat93 (talk) 17:40, 8 October 2022 (UTC)
3. Tomotron^{Star Forge} 23:07, 8 October 2022 (UTC)
4. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 03:32, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
5. Infobox image goes hard, as they say. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 05:21, 23 October 2022 (UTC)

Object

Ahr's friend

• Nice to join me! It seems you're missing a BTS. —Tomotron^{Star Forge} 10:03, 10 July 2022 (UTC)
  • That is embarrassing, sorry about that. fixed Editoronthewiki (talk) 12:07, 10 July 2022 (UTC)
    • Everyone makes mistakes at least once in a while. —Tomotron^{Star Forge} 13:44, 10 July 2022 (UTC)

NanoLuuke

• "Although Vader technically outranked [...]." The sentence is confusing regarding Vader rank/relation to others/Palpatine, and Vader relation to Ahr and his local expertise. NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 11:52, 11 July 2022 (UTC)
  • Thoughts?Editoronthewiki (talk) 03:08, 12 July 2022 (UTC)
    • "all others in the Empire other than his master" is too repetitive. The rest of the sentence feels too heavy, maybe because you're trying to follow the dialogue from the comics too much. In fact, the whole segment, from "Although Vader technically ..." to end of the paragraph, could be rewritten to offer a better synthesis of information rather than a play by play of the comics dialogue. NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 10:29, 12 July 2022 (UTC)
      • Better? Editoronthewiki (talk) 18:19, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
• "to do battle with the rebels" Feels slightly convoluted, like talking about line infantry from the Napoleonic Wars. NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 11:52, 11 July 2022 (UTC)
  • SimplifiedEditoronthewiki (talk) 03:08, 12 July 2022 (UTC)

Samonic's attack on Editoronthewiki's nomination

• Please introduce some more variation when identifying Ahr.
  • Good? Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:25, 20 September 2022 (UTC)
• Shouldn't Venator be italicized at all times?
  • Nope, when its just "Venator" on its own it does not get italicized Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:25, 20 September 2022 (UTC)
• Do you really need to specify Vader's lightsaber was red? Samonic ^(Talk) 09:20, 17 September 2022 (UTC)
  • I have no memory of adding that lol, removed Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:25, 20 September 2022 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• Please add a Mediacat.
  • Done Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:26, 8 October 2022 (UTC)
• Reviewing note: I've changed instances of "rebels" so that people don't confuse them for the Rebel Alliance. UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:07, 7 October 2022 (UTC)
  • Ah, a good idea. There was one last use of "rebels" in the intro, which I replaced to be in line with your revision Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:26, 8 October 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 05:21, 23 October 2022 (UTC)