Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Attack on Emperor Fel

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Attack on Emperor Fel

• Nominated by: Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 17:31, February 11, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Another Legacy nom. Also, a battle featuring Darth Krayt's rise to power.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 23:07, February 14, 2010 (UTC)
2. CC7567 ^(talk) 04:41, February 24, 2010 (UTC)
3. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 21:56, February 25, 2010 (UTC)
4. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 05:28, February 28, 2010 (UTC)
5. JangFett ^(Talk) 16:31, February 28, 2010 (UTC)

Object

1. Soresu
   • Is this name canonical or conjecture?
     • I couldn't find it called this anywhere; my assumption was just that since it didn't have a conjecture tag before I worked on it, maybe I was just missing it somewhere. However, I never found anything stating that the name is canonical, and thus have changed the page to reflect this.
   • Krayt then killed Fel's decoy, and pronounced himself Galactic Emperor, with the war now over. Could you reword this? Also, a 1 sentence para is a little too short. Suggest integrating into the previous para. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 15:25, February 12, 2010 (UTC)
     • Done so. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 22:37, February 14, 2010 (UTC)
2. Attack of the Clone
   • If the name is conjecture, then it shouldn't really be used as the article's official, bolded title.
     • I disagree. Anti-Sith conspiracy, Evacuation of Rychel, Stranglethorn crisis, Raid on Ziro the Hutt's Coruscant club, all FAs, bold their conjectural title in the intro.
       • I realize that, but at least (for the most part) they don't capitalize it like it's an official title. Also, that last one is an official name. CC7567 ^(talk) 22:37, February 21, 2010 (UTC)
         • Oops, must have linked to the wrong one there. Anyway, changed.
   • "the Sith Order emerged, offering to ally itself with the Empire and serve as their answer to the Alliance's Jedi": first, a little shaky singular/plural match-up issues, and second, how do you mean that the Sith were the "answer" to the Jedi? I'd recommend trying to reword it, as it's overall unclear.
     • Reworded.
   • Please clarify from the beginning (mostly in the intro) that the decoy is a decoy. Per the Layout Guide, the article needs to have a neutral perspective and not follow that of only one side of the battle.
     • Fixed.
       • Watch run-ons, please. CC7567 ^(talk) 22:37, February 21, 2010 (UTC)
         • Are there any more run-ons that you want me to fix, because you haven't struck this objection yet.
           • Mainly the run-on that was established from the sentence pertaining to this objection: "Krayt believed that the decoy was Fel himself and stated that his Sith Order had helped win the war and now he sought his reward—Fel's life." CC7567 ^(talk) 01:18, February 23, 2010 (UTC)
             • Ok.
   • "The Sith threatened Calixte before leaving, telling her that she now served Maladi." Since both characters are female, the pronoun usage is still unclear here. Please clarify. I'd recommend using names throughout the whole section if possible to avoid any possibility of misinterpretation.
     • Better?
   • Please find something to use as the "DEFAULTSORT" for the categories, as that's what is usually done. I would do it myself, but I'm unsure of what would be the best fit for it. CC7567 ^(talk) 08:19, February 21, 2010 (UTC)
     • Done. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 22:23, February 23, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:38, February 28, 2010 (UTC)