Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Anstiss

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Anstiss

  • Nominated by: Coruscantfan (Talk) 18:02, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A very determined cop

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 18:05, June 7, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:48, June 7, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Good to see you promoting articles connected with your first FAN, dude.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:12, June 16, 2012 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:07, June 18, 2012 (UTC)
  5. ACvote—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 03:10, June 25, 2012 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Menkooroo (talk) 21:09, July 3, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Exiled Jedi
  • I would mention that the individual was affiliated with the Republic in the intro.
    • Done.
  • Do we know that she made enemies at CSF headquarters?
    • Yep, she states that during the initial conversation with the player.
  • "Gambo resisted arrest and ended beating up Anstiss in several fights." Please reword, it doesn't seem quite right now.
  • Also, I would mention that the beatings had nearly killed her.
    • Done.
  • In the BTS you mention that the player can kill Gambo. Does this give the player dark side points? If it does please mention that in the BTS, because if it does not give dark side points it seems to me that killing him could be just as likely as capturing him.
    • Done.
  • Some of my characters have been like Anstiss—run into a room—die—repeat.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 18:22, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
    • LOL
  • I just completed the mission with a new character, and I think it would be best to mention that Gambo was a Black Sun enforcer and murderer just to give a little more context.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 04:10, June 1, 2012 (UTC)
Cade
  • Like I said in Stansun's GAN, the new sourcing method. This one'd be {{TORcite|type=general|Cantina Contusions|Coruscant}}... which gives Star Wars: The Old Republic—Mission: "Cantina Contusions" on Coruscant.
    • Sigh, take a vacation for a month and everything changes... lol
      • It's fine... we decided to do a new template in like a day. It's less than a week old—almost no one knows about it yet. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 19:34, June 3, 2012 (UTC)
  • You fail to mention that Gambo's a Houk.
    • Done.
  • "The individual entered the cantina and confronted Gambo and was able to convince him to surrender". Too much of a run-on. Personally, I'd try something like "Entering the cantina, the individual confronted Gambo and was able to convince the Houk criminal to surrender."
    • Done.
  • In the BtS, mention why we assume it's light side. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 18:01, June 2, 2012 (UTC)
    • Well, we're not really assuming. Its a light side mission because Coruscant is a light side affiliated planet. All missions are "light side" even if you can choose a dark side ending.
      • Still need to mention that fact. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 19:34, June 3, 2012 (UTC)
        • Nevermind, I misread your objection. I though you were asking why it was a light side mission. Your statement makes so much more sense now! :) Coruscantfan (Talk) 23:38, June 5, 2012 (UTC)
  • Also, I'd say around 3,641 BBY. We don't know exactly.
Return of the Jedi
Cop
  • per Trayus's objection to Mal below, I believe that the date given in the article doesn't come from the game itself and needs further sourcing.
    • Update: Per the discussion here, the two sources you need are The Essential Atlas and this forum post, since since the latter dates the game at "around ten years after the treaty" and the former says "treaty is in 3,653 BBY." Putting these two sources together gives us an approximate date for the events of The Old Republic, so be sure to say something like "around 3,641 BBY" or "approximately 3,643 BBY."

      You can use two references if you want (eg [1][2] together), or you can combine them into one reference like Trayus has done here. If this is too confusing, just copy the code that Trayus used, but change it so that it refers to the events discussed in Anstiss's article. Does this make sense? Menkooroo (talk) 04:09, June 27, 2012 (UTC)
      • FINAL UPDATE: I hope that my previous post made sense. If not, just copy the code here to source the date. And make sure to say "c. 3,641 BBY" or "around" or "approximately" or something. Cheers. Menkooroo (talk) 04:17, June 28, 2012 (UTC)
        • Sorry about the delay, with the storms and blackouts the overtime has been killing my schedule, not that I'm complaining about the extra pay! ;) Yep it all made sense and I went ahead and used your code. Coruscantfan (Talk) 19:37, July 3, 2012 (UTC)
  • "During each arrest attempt, Anstiss was unable to subdue Gambo, and he beat her severely, nearly killing her. With that, Anstiss retreated to outside the cantina and called for backup." This reads kind of oddly, as it makes it sound like he beat and almost killed her every time she tried to arrest him --- with that said, it also reads as if she retreated and called for backup every time that it happened. Can you make it more clear that she only called for backup the final time, and clarify whether or not she was severely beaten every time or just the final time?
    • Clarified.
  • The intro and the bio assert that she thinks she has enemies at CSF HQ, but "Personality and traits" definitively states that she does. Is this for sure true, or is it just something she suspects? Menkooroo 03:44, June 26, 2012 (UTC)
    • Coply intuition is one of those... gray areas of fact. lol But yes she does say "think" so I've made the correction in the P&t section. Coruscantfan (Talk) 19:37, July 3, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:11, July 3, 2012 (UTC)