Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Angela Morley

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Angela Morley

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Support

  1. NanoLuukeCloning facility 00:26, 6 November 2021 (UTC)
  2. Objections handled via Discord :) Immi Thrax RainbowRebellion2 (she/her) (talk) 03:06, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Loved her score for Watership Down Commander Code-8 Hello There! 01:00, 20 December 2021 (UTC)
  4. ACvote OOM 224 17:54, 19 January 2022 (UTC)
  5. ACvote JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 14:47, 28 January 2022 (UTC)

Object

NanoLuuke
  • In intro. "(born on March 10, 1924 in Leeds, West Yorkshire, England)" should be replaced by (birth date – death date). --NanoLuukeCloning facility 13:44, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
  • In Biography, events have to be presented in chronological order, so "Angela Morley was an English composer and conductor." should not be the first sentence. --NanoLuukeCloning facility 13:44, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
  • "Over the years, Morley became a frequent collaborator of Williams, working as an orchestrator on many of his subsequent film scores." should be removed, per policy. I have no objection as to putting this information in the introduction, as allowed by the same policy. --NanoLuukeCloning facility 13:44, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
CC-8
  • A screenshot of the moment the force theme plays would make a good image for the bio, unless you can find something more approrpiate Commander Code-8 Hello There! 13:49, 19 November 2021 (UTC)
    • Good idea! Added. Dentface (talk) 01:04, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
  • The body should specify the category Morley was nominated for as well as the film it was for.
    • Appeasing our overlord Jocasta. Dentface (talk) 18:54, 1 December 2021 (UTC)
  • "collaborate throughout the production of A New Hope in 1977." This should specify that the film was released in 77, unless a source specifies that the collaborations took place in that year. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 11:26, 23 November 2021 (UTC)
    • Title: Added.
    • The source explicitly states that Morley began working with Williams in 77 well after the film's orchestration was underway. Dentface (talk) 01:53, 24 November 2021 (UTC)
      • If that's the case then why is the additional reference to the film itself there? Commander Code-8 Hello There! 02:47, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
        • Good point. I did it out of habit. Removed. Dentface (talk) 17:29, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Some of the information should be presented in a more chronological order, like I don't think ESB should be mentioned in relation to Spencer's role in it, and Morely's contribution to the ANH score should be mentioned in the paragraph about her participation in that film. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:23, 9 December 2021 (UTC)
  • There's duplicate references in the third body paragraph.
  • The part about her ESB contributions going unrevealed are not mentioned in the source that's given, I think it'd be fine to remove that sentence Commander Code-8 Hello There! 08:12, 19 December 2021 (UTC)
    • Duplicate refs: Done.
    • ESB: Done. Dentface (talk) 22:41, 19 December 2021 (UTC)
OOM
  • The image in the body could be enlarged a bit more. Also, spaces in file names should be replaced by underscores.
  • The two short paragraphs are too short to warrant paragraphs of their own, so they should be combined with the others.
  • "As such, all of Morley's specific contributions to the film's score remain unknown, with one exception" — I don't think this is necessary. The next sentence could just be rewritten slightly to say that she revealed one of her orchestrations being the trench run's "The Force Theme" OOM 224 17:59, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Image: Done.
    • Merged one paragraph. Which other paragraph in your opinion is too short?
    • Adjusted sentence as requested. Dentface (talk) 21:57, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
      • I think the first and second paragraphs of the Biography can be combined. OOM 224 22:02, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Lastly, just a few minor things: context should be provided for ANH at its initial mention in the Biography (in this case, the date), "toward" is preferred over "towards" in formal writing, and the image caption is missing some links OOM 224 22:05, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Film date, and "toward" have been added. What links need to be added to the image caption? Per here, "links should only be added in quote attributions and image captions if the subject is not linked in the article body already." I don't see anything in the caption that isn't already linked in the body. Am I missing something? Dentface (talk) 03:19, 19 January 2022 (UTC)
      • The Death Star, but I've added the link now OOM 224 17:51, 19 January 2022 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • {{WebCite}} can be implemented for her website in the external links section. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 00:00, 20 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Just checked, her website is now live again, so I just put it back to "Official site" without an archive link. Dentface (talk) 06:24, 20 January 2022 (UTC)
  • The other articles that mention her work in SW can be added to external links. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 22:38, 21 January 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 14:47, 28 January 2022 (UTC)