Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Ambush of Attichitcuk

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Ambush of Attichitcuk

• Nominated by: Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 09:15, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: This proves that Attichitcuk is immortal, much like his son. What Yuuzhan Vong?

(0 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)

Support

1. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 10:09, June 19, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge

• Attichitcuk was named as one of the leaders of the colonists for his success in the Senate. Attichitcuk's son Chewbacca was also named as one of the colonist's leaders: Can you vary your word choice here a little?
  • Done.
• arriving shortly before the Wookiees. The Wookiees arrived on Alaris Prime and began setting up their colony and several bases: Same here.
  • Done
    • The repetition is still there ("arriving" + "arrived"). Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:22, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
      • Done
• begun killing the gundarks. As soon as all of the gundarks were killed: Here too, I suppose "culling" should be "killing".
  • You seem to have fixed this in your changes
    • Sorry for not being clearer, but I would like to see this rephrased to avoid two "kill"s. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:22, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
      • Killed :P Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 08:56, June 19, 2014 (UTC)
• Do you need to source the "Alaris Prime colonial war" infobox?
  • Do you mean the template down the bottom? I don't think so. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 07:39, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
• Very good work. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 10:38, June 13, 2014 (UTC)

Cadeth

• As you've been told before, image captions need punctuation when they're full sentences.
  • Done
• Please look at your quotes.
  • Whoops
• The intro and prelude seem far too large for an article that has two sentences in the actual "Ambush" section. There's far too much context; please reduce them. I'll review once you do. Cade Calrayn 20:09, July 11, 2014 (UTC)
  • I've cut a bit back but more may have to go. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 07:59, July 13, 2014 (UTC)
    • I've taken the liberty of rewriting both the intro and the prelude far more concisely and without all the superfluous context. Please go over the rest of the article and do the same. Cade Calrayn 17:31, July 22, 2014 (UTC)
      • Thanks for that. Sorry for the slow response. How's it look now? Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 06:25, August 4, 2014 (UTC)
• "a company trying to illegally takeover Alaris Prime" Though it's not there anymore, "takeover" is not a verb, it's a noun. Cade Calrayn 17:31, July 22, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

1. Unaddressed objection over two weeks old. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:53, August 5, 2014 (UTC)
2. 1358 ^(Talk) 21:39, August 5, 2014 (UTC)
3. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 22:29, August 5, 2014 (UTC)