Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Alysun Celz

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Alysun Celz

• Nominated by: —Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 23:12, January 26, 2013 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: A Dark Jedi from "Poison Moon".

(4 ACs/4 Users/8 Total)

Support

1. —MJ— ^Holocomm 23:27, January 26, 2013 (UTC)
2. Did a copy-edit. Though, please refer to the comments section. Trak Nar ^{Ramble on} 06:02, January 27, 2013 (UTC)
3. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 21:41, January 27, 2013 (UTC)
4. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:31, February 5, 2013 (UTC)
5. This isn't fair, Kasra. I feel... empty by looking at these pre-reviewed articles without anything (or very little else) left to correct :p. Winterz (talk) 17:45, February 13, 2013 (UTC)
6. CC7567 ^(talk) 05:48, February 23, 2013 (UTC)
7. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 11:53, February 24, 2013 (UTC)
8. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 07:12, February 25, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd

• The intro seems a liiiiiittle too long in relation to the rest of the article. Try to shave it down.
  • Still seems a bit too long to me right now. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:06, February 1, 2013 (UTC)
    • Trimmed some more.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 01:26, February 1, 2013 (UTC)
• Seeing some linking issues here and there.
• Nice work. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 03:23, January 30, 2013 (UTC)
  • Thanks, both taken care of, I believe.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 19:04, January 30, 2013 (UTC)

Cav

• Celz gave them false information about Rex - what kind of information?
• Can we get a date for the Dark Horse Extra issues? - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 13:04, February 21, 2013 (UTC)
  • Both taken care of.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:34, February 21, 2013 (UTC)

Attack of the Clone

• Could you clarify what "they disabled her" means? It isn't very clear at first glance. CC7567 ^(talk) 21:14, February 22, 2013 (UTC)
  • Changed to "disarmed."—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 03:57, February 23, 2013 (UTC)

Toprawa

• This is pretty nitpicky, but I feel like the Hoth asteroid field should be mentioned, or at least pipelinked, in here at some point.
• It's not strictly necessary to mention her species and gender in the Bio and P/T. I would recommend removing it from the P/T. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 09:28, February 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • Both taken care of.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 20:00, February 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • I'm not going to hold it up on this, but it's still not necessary to say that she's a Human in the P/T when this has already been established in the Biography. Just saying she was "light-skinned with flowing black hair" would suffice under the understanding that she's a Human. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 11:53, February 24, 2013 (UTC)
      • Took your suggestion, Tope.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 14:28, February 24, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 07:12, February 25, 2013 (UTC)

• Many thanks to Master Jonathan for copy-edit and review.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 23:12, January 26, 2013 (UTC)
• As I mentioned in Et Rex's review, I seem to recall that Poison Moon was one of the Hasbro mini-comics, as indicated by the Menace Revealed Omnibus. However, at present, I do not have this Omnibus on hand, so I can't confirm that. Could someone look into this and double-check? Trak Nar ^{Ramble on} 06:02, January 27, 2013 (UTC)
  • The publisher's summary on Dark Horse says this: "Collects Star Wars #27: Starcrash; Star Wars: The Hunt for Aurra Sing; Star Wars: Jedi Quest #1-#4; Star Wars: Starfighter—Crossbones #1-#3; Star Wars Episode II Hasbro minicomics #1-#4; "Heart of Fire" from Dark Horse Extra #35-#37; and "Poison Moon" from Dark Horse Extra #44-#47."—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 15:41, January 27, 2013 (UTC)
    • I recall, however, that on the page preceding the comic, it said it was a mini-comic. I might be mistaking it for another comic, but could the page be double-checked? Nevermind, I must be thinking of something else. Trak Nar ^{Ramble on} 05:12, January 28, 2013 (UTC)