Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Air pistol

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Air pistol

  • Nominated by: Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:31, August 2, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My first nomination for the new barn-burner.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Nice work EJ--Talrrivanian JaingHead (Headquarters) 19:16, August 3, 2011 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Just as a reminder, when you pipelink to articles, capitalize the first letter in the link always. For instance, instead of saying [[limb/Legends|hand]], say [[Limb/Legends|hand]]. Otherwise, good job. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 12:28, August 8, 2011 (UTC)
  3. Not to be confused with air horns. ~SavageBOB sig 17:31, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Cool. CC7567 (talk) 19:09, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 00:20, August 11, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Green ducks
  • Even though the air pistol looked like a toy, it was about as powerful as a normal slugthrower pistol, but the air pistol lacked its range and had slightly less durability. This sentence is choppy, consider revising.
  • Pistols is used to much in the bio.--Talrrivanian JaingHead (Headquarters) 14:39, August 3, 2011 (UTC)
    • I took care of some instances of "pistol", but I need to say "slugthrower pistol" and not "slugthrower" for the comparisons.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:39, August 3, 2011 (UTC)
Kilson
  • In the Intro you should mention the time periods in which the air pistol was used. You could summarize it as, "The air pistol was available from the waning days of the Republic into the years of the Yuuzhan Vong war," or something like that.
  • You should identify the "normal slugthrower pistol" by name in the article when you first mention it. Also, replace some of the occurrences of "normal slughthrower pistol" with striker projector pistol.
    • Done.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 11:10, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
      • Good job of that, but now I think you can shorten ref 3 to just say "Arms & Equipment Guide, p. 23." since you stated what the reference says in the Body of the article. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 05:58, August 8, 2011 (UTC)
  • In the History section, "The air pistol was produced by Field Sports for around two hundred credits..." it's a little unclear here what you mean. By saying "around", it makes it sound like the weapon didn't cost exactly 200 credits. However, the Infobox does say it cost 200 credits exactly. Please clear this up.
  • Otherwise, another fantastic job EJ. Thank you for taking part in the barn-burner. :) Kilson(Let's have a chat) 09:32, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
Prepare to be savaged…
  • You should choose whether you prefer to link to individual colors, or to the word color, and do one or the other, but not both.
    • How is this?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:03, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
      • I think it read a bit better before, so I did a partial revert. I was mostly talking about linking, anyway. ~SavageBOB sig 17:31, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
  • The constant comparison to the Striker got a bit tiresome, so I tried to reword some things. Please check that I didn't misrepresent the OS! ~SavageBOB sig 14:44, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
Moffship
  • For reference 2, it might be best if you clarify that the range increment listed for the air pistol is 4 meters (or however the Arms & Equipment Guide lists it).
  • In reference 4, you state "...means that sentient species of small of greater size..." Should that be "of small or greater size," or something else?
  • "...it used a clip of contained twenty specialized slugs..." - I presume this should be "a clip that contained," but I wanted to be sure.
  • That's all. Nice job. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 21:17, August 10, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:20, August 11, 2011 (UTC)


Does anyone have any suggestions on the references? They seem rather unwieldly, but I can seem to think of a better way to do them.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:31, August 2, 2011 (UTC)