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Agoraphobia

Nominated by: AmazinglyCool (talk) 19:25, 6 May 2023 (UTC)
Nomination comments:
Date Archived: 00:57, 28 July 2023 (UTC)
Final word count: 600 words (72 introduction, 493 body, 35 behind the scenes)
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Support

Imperators II^(Talk) 09:31, 7 July 2023 (UTC)
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 04:04, 18 July 2023 (UTC)
Provided that Lew's objections get addressed.—spookywilloww^talk 00:19, 26 July 2023 (UTC)
Lewisr (talk) 00:03, 28 July 2023 (UTC)
Booply (talk) 00:51, 28 July 2023 (UTC)

Object

spookly

~~The page for Darth Maul: Shadow Hunter seems to imply those events are dateable.~~

~~The paragraphs under specific agoraphobes could be tweaked slightly so that they all don't lead in with 'In [Year]...' for repetitiveness.~~—spookywilloww^talk 04:45, 4 June 2023 (UTC)
- Addressed. AmazinglyCool (talk) 23:02, 5 June 2023 (UTC)
I think some sectioning could be introduced since there's 5 history paragraphs; it seems like the first three paragraphs are up through the Imperial Era, and the last two are post-Empire, which might make for a good split.
~~Would be great if you could tuck in an extra 1-2 sentences to the intro.~~—spookywilloww^talk 23:28, 9 July 2023 (UTC)
- Addressed. AmazinglyCool (talk) 22:51, 25 July 2023 (UTC)

Imp

I... think something more along the lines of the first sentence from that resource on IRL agoraphobia would do better - imo "enclosed spaces" veers just a bit too much toward a potentially confusing overlap with claustrophobia. Imperators II^(Talk) 08:29, 6 June 2023 (UTC)
- Addressed. AmazinglyCool (talk) 21:11, 7 June 2023 (UTC)
~~Please see if my copy-edit of the Description section accurately reflects the apparently contradictory descriptions of the Selonians and the Ebruchi.~~
- Looks good. AmazinglyCool (talk) 15:59, 21 June 2023 (UTC)
~~Uh, can you confirm that Darth Plagueis really calls Muunilinst a colony (world) of the Muuns? Other sources I'm looking at don't seem to indicate the Muuns were native to some other world.~~ Imperators II^(Talk) 19:59, 17 June 2023 (UTC)
- Plagueis looks like it doesn't, so that'd have to be changed, but Ultimate Alien Anthology states that Scipio was the Muun homeworld and that Muunilist is a major colony. AmazinglyCool (talk) 15:59, 21 June 2023 (UTC)
Do we know the occupation for Dracmus? And also, I think it'd be valuable context to know why was Dracmus, a member of a species that had outer space-related agoraphobia, on the ship in the first place.
- Addressed.
  - Hmmm, you've added their reason for traveling to Selonia, but why was Dracmus offworld in the first place? Imperators II^(Talk) 08:03, 24 June 2023 (UTC)
  - That's never established, only that Dracmus was on Corellia. AmazinglyCool (talk) 21:15, 24 June 2023 (UTC)
    - That's odd. I'm assuming they traveled from Corellia together, then? Imperators II^(Talk) 21:34, 24 June 2023 (UTC)
      - Yeah, thats what the book provides. AmazinglyCool (talk) 12:01, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
        Well, does the novel at least establish how Dracmus got Solo to travel aboard the ship? How did they meet on Corellia? Imperators II^(Talk) 10:11, 28 June 2023 (UTC)
        I've added some context from the previous book which I think will help. AmazinglyCool (talk) 00:19, 29 June 2023 (UTC)
~~Could you give the quote for the "near orbit" bit? Keeping in mind that orbit is not equal to atmospheric entry.~~ Imperators II^(Talk) 09:48, 23 June 2023 (UTC)
- Seems like I got the terms mixed up, should be fixed now. AmazinglyCool (talk) 15:57, 23 June 2023 (UTC)
~~Does Showdown at Centerpoint really establish Solo to still be a smuggler while still serving under the New Republic?~~ Imperators II^(Talk) 08:03, 24 June 2023 (UTC)
- I was mistaken from context provided at the back of the book, but upon another look through he is better referred to as a captain, so I changed it. AmazinglyCool (talk) 21:15, 24 June 2023 (UTC)
~~About the Shadow Hunter bit - looking at the novel, there's more context to be added for the people that are characterized as having "nascent agoraphobia".~~ Imperators II^(Talk) 12:55, 29 June 2023 (UTC)
- Added more context. AmazinglyCool (talk) 12:40, 30 June 2023 (UTC)
  - I do think that there's more to be added about that specific type of building that's used as an example of some Coruscanti's agoraphobia (in contrast, some of the context about Assant's mission could be cut, for example, the bit about her potential position change in the Order). And also, I think said characterization should be phrased more as a fact presented from the more-or-less objective and "omniscient" perspective of the novel's narration as opposed to explicitly being framed as Assant's opinion. Imperators II^(Talk) 16:03, 30 June 2023 (UTC)
    - Addressed. AmazinglyCool (talk) 22:22, 5 July 2023 (UTC)

Anil

~~In what other entry is agoraphobia mentioned in The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia? Just asking to confirm the use of {{CSWECite|multiple}}.~~
- Only in Ibtisam's, I was under the impression that the template was meant to be used when something had no entry of its own, but I changed it.
  - Yes, you are right. But "multiple" should be used only when the subject is mentioned in multiple entries. If it is referenced in a single entry, the template must be used, but without specifying page numbers. I've fixed this one, but you can read more about that here for your future nominations, which I'm looking forward to! Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 04:04, 18 July 2023 (UTC)
    - Thank you for letting me know! AmazinglyCool (talk) 22:52, 25 July 2023 (UTC)
~~Audiobooks for Darth Maul: Shadow Hunter and Showdown at Centerpoint are apparently abridged adaptations, therefore it needs to be checked if agoraphobia is actually mentioned in those or not.~~ Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 03:39, 15 July 2023 (UTC)
- Agoraphobia is mentioned in both. AmazinglyCool (talk) 22:49, 17 July 2023 (UTC)

Lew

~~You should add context for Coruscant in the intro~~
- Addressed.
~~Just to confirm, is Selonians being susceptible citeable to Coruscant and the Core Worlds? Since it's currently being done in the description section~~ Lewisr (talk) 23:38, 25 July 2023 (UTC)
- It is citeable to that reference book. AmazinglyCool (talk) 23:34, 27 July 2023 (UTC)
  - Thanks for confirming, for the sake of consistent reference between the infobox and body I changed the infobox ref to that then Lewisr (talk) 00:03, 28 July 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:56, 28 July 2023 (UTC)