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Aftab Ackbar's MC95 Star Cruiser
- Nominated by: Liverpool92
14:24, 1 September 2021 (UTC) - Nomination comments: First GAN in a while
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- Just double check your linking :) Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:37, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
Have to reiterate Manoof's comment; ensure that everything that can be linked is linked. UberSoldat93 (talk) 15:20, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
- LucaRoR
(Talk) 20:25, 10 December 2021 (UTC)
Supreme Emperor Holocomm 16:44, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:40, 12 January 2022 (UTC)
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Macaroni
Why is this not at Aftab Ackbar's MC95 Star Cruiser?JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 03:04, 11 October 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
The spirit of this Layout Guide rule applies here: "Organizations in any character infobox that are inherently implied by a stated role (examples: Stormtrooper Corps does not need to be linked within a character article body if the article states that the character is a stormtrooper; Imperial Officer Corps does not need to be linked in the article body if the article states that the subject is an Imperial officer)." See other starship status articles (e.g. Adjudicator) to understand how things like product line and model are handled in the body.Bunch of missing or incorrectly placed punctuation and grammatical errors throughout the article. Please revise.- Still seeing a few more of both. For example, "The star cruiser used by the late veteran Admiral Gial Ackbar's son, Aftab was the flagship of a fleet of starships located on the planet Mon Cala.," "Along with the rest of the fleet, they entered hyperspace and went on to joined the Resistance and its navy,...." UberSoldat93
(talk) 08:01, 20 November 2021 (UTC)
- Fixed.--Liverpool92
11:26, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
- Please see my copy-edit. UberSoldat93
(talk) 19:57, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
- Please see my copy-edit. UberSoldat93
- Fixed.--Liverpool92
- Still seeing a few more of both. For example, "The star cruiser used by the late veteran Admiral Gial Ackbar's son, Aftab was the flagship of a fleet of starships located on the planet Mon Cala.," "Along with the rest of the fleet, they entered hyperspace and went on to joined the Resistance and its navy,...." UberSoldat93
Missing Mediacat.UberSoldat93(talk) 20:03, 9 November 2021 (UTC)
Description is currently very weirdly worded. I would mention Aftab utilizing the ship in History instead.- Fixed.--Liverpool92
11:26, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
- Aftab was one thing, but the whole sentence still needs restructuring: "A heavy[2] star cruiser[3] was an MC95 Star Cruiser model that was equipped with a hyperdrive and an engine." UberSoldat93
(talk) 19:57, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
- Aftab was one thing, but the whole sentence still needs restructuring: "A heavy[2] star cruiser[3] was an MC95 Star Cruiser model that was equipped with a hyperdrive and an engine." UberSoldat93
- Fixed.--Liverpool92
Notes are needed to connect the sources you are currently using to this specific ship (see status articles pointed out above). Also, does the Encyclopedia use the term "Heavy Star Cruiser" in full? That would eliminate the need for two separate refs.UberSoldat93(talk) 08:01, 20 November 2021 (UTC)
- Asking around.--Liverpool92
11:26, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
- Removed. Discussed on Discord.--Liverpool92
02:45, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
- Star Cruiser and docking bays can be sourced straight to the comic if they can be visually discerned (e.g. Formidable). UberSoldat93
(talk) 11:22, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
- Done.
- Star Cruiser and docking bays can be sourced straight to the comic if they can be visually discerned (e.g. Formidable). UberSoldat93
- Removed. Discussed on Discord.--Liverpool92
- Asking around.--Liverpool92
Aftab being a Mon Calamari male is now intro-exclusive info.UberSoldat93(talk) 11:22, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
I'd say a "Commanders and crew" section would be in order here, in which you can also mention Aftab's dad since it isn't really suited for History.UberSoldat93(talk) 11:47, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
SE
Can we see if it has multiple engines, or just one?- The infobox is the only shot of the ship so it is hard to tell
How did Nossor Ri buy time?- Added in history section
If we see the inside of the bridge, is there anything that can be said about the interior in the description?Supreme Emperor Holocomm 16:24, 27 December 2021 (UTC)
Ayrehead
After my copy-edit there's room for another image in the history section.Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:34, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
Comments
- Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 13:40, 12 January 2022 (UTC)