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Abbaji

  • Nominated by: Winterz (talk) 19:42, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: eheh, no rest for the Wicked!

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 19:40, January 5, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Mattjorgdbb (talk) 04:57, January 8, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:18, January 9, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote JangFett (Talk) 20:38, February 8, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote One or two pieces of formatting left me frowning, so please take a look through my changes. CC7567 (talk) 04:22, February 14, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Exiled Jedi
  • It seems to me that with the information about rainforest and the trees that you could have a description section.
    • Wouldn't that leave just the two last sentences in the History section? :s I'll await for your reply to decide what my best approach should be.
      • I don't seem a problem with having a shorter history section. The stuff about the trees and rainforests doesn't fit in as well with the history section.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 19:11, January 5, 2013 (UTC)
        • Done.
          • The part about Xizor receiving the tree should probably be in the history section.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 19:26, January 5, 2013 (UTC)
  • Please mention that the planet is terrestrial in the body.
    • Done.
  • Please clarify who found the atmosphere breathable.
    • I'm confused. What do you mean by found? I've found no information of such kind.
      • Well, its more of a picky thing, but I would just thinking that you could say that most species found the air breathable.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 19:11, January 5, 2013 (UTC)
        • Ehrm Ej, the source only says that it's breathable. But fine, I modified it.
  • How about an article for the dwarf firethorn tree (it's much different from the normal variety) and Xizor's business rival.
    • Corrected that. It was a tiny and perfect replica of the trees, not a subspecies. Article for his rival created.
  • The way you mention the firethorn trees in the body makes it seem that the trees only grow in the one grove on the planet, but leaves open the possibility that they may grow elsewhere. Please reword.
    • Done.
  • I wouldn't say that the Star Wars Gamer 9 was soon after the encyclopedia. The encyclopedia came out in 1998 and the magazine came out in 2002.
    • Corrected.
  • The Star Wars Encyclopedia is missing from the source list.
    • Fixed.
  • Where is the planet mentioned in the mentioned in the Gamer article? I have looked over that article many times, and have done so a few times today, but I cannot find it mentioned anywhere.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:40, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
    • Ops sorry, fixed. Winterz (talk) 18:37, January 5, 2013 (UTC)
      • Some information in the infobox is still sourced to the article, please correct this.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 19:11, January 5, 2013 (UTC)
        • That's because that source identifies the sector, subsector and region beforehand. Winterz (talk) 19:21, January 5, 2013 (UTC)
Jangeth driveby
  • Please reload your infobox. More to come. JangFett (Talk) 16:56, January 5, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done. Winterz (talk) 18:46, January 5, 2013 (UTC)
      • Check your formatting. JangFett (Talk) 04:20, January 7, 2013 (UTC)
        • Could you be more specific, sir? Winterz (talk) 04:38, January 7, 2013 (UTC)
          • Take a look at those double brackets after |affiliation :P JangFett (Talk) 03:44, January 20, 2013 (UTC)
            • Argh, I was not aware that inserting the brackets on a separate line was wrong :c. Anyway, fixed. Winterz (talk) 04:21, January 20, 2013 (UTC)
  • Could you try to add at least 1 more sentence in the intro to briefly touch on the planet's history? At the moment it's fairly short and only mentions the planet's description. JangFett (Talk) 07:23, January 20, 2013 (UTC)
    • Done. Also, after your copy-edit I noticed how poor the article was and improved some other things. Winterz (talk) 12:06, January 20, 2013 (UTC)
Cav
  • Specifying that the Spar sector is a subsector of the Zuma sector needs to be explicit. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:00, January 8, 2013 (UTC)
    • Tweaked. Good enough? ;) Winterz (talk) 15:09, January 8, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:22, February 14, 2013 (UTC)


  • I'm not sure how to proceed with that Prince Xizor's part. Considering that there's no date to that event and that it's more related to the trees than to the planet itself, does it still need to be organized chronologically? Winterz (talk) 19:42, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
    • I think where you've placed is perfectly fine. We can basically infer that he received it during his adulthood, if not during his tenure as head of Black Sun, which is a fairly small span of time. There's no other information in the article that would possibly interfere with that time frame. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:00, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
      • Okay, thanks for the heads-up. Winterz (talk) 20:04, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • As more of a note, it looks like Forum:CT:Utilizing Atlas grid coordinates is heading for a snowball. Nothing needs to be done since it hasn't passed, but if it does, the grid coordinates will need to be removed from the Description section. CC7567 (talk) 04:22, February 14, 2013 (UTC)