Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Abaron

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Abaron

  • Nominated by: Winterz (talk) 23:23, April 11, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Heyoo

(3 ACs/5 Users/8 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:35, April 12, 2014 (UTC)
  2. I think i remember this mission. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 06:36, April 29, 2014 (UTC)
  3. 501st dogma(talk) 17:18, May 2, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:51, June 7, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:19, June 18, 2014 (UTC)
  6. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:07, June 24, 2014 (UTC)
  7. ACvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 03:02, June 30, 2014 (UTC)
  8. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:13, June 30, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • Could we get a little bit context for Korriban and the Dark Council?
    • Done.
      • I did some tweaking in the intro, please see if you're fine with it. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:35, April 12, 2014 (UTC)
  • A male Sith, he was present in the Sith Academy on Korriban, where he assigned a promising Sith Acolyte to scan several elevated Sith while concerned about them lacking the blood from the original and ancient Sith, which he deemed necessary: That is five times Sith, is there any possibility you could change one or two?
    • I've tweaked it slightly, see if it pleases you.
  • That is all. I'm correct in my assumption that there is no difference between his answers by light/dark side choices? Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:11, April 12, 2014 (UTC)
    • Yes, I explained it in the Bts section. The player may choose to ramble and tell him that he's no one to question others' purity but Abaron practically replies the same. Winterz (talk) 13:29, April 12, 2014 (UTC)
Code-8
  • In the Bts could you say a bit more about what the light and dark side choices are? Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 01:16, April 14, 2014 (UTC)
    • There really isn't much relevance in what the player says. The player can just give a snarky comment from either side, but it makes no difference to Abaron. So respectfully, I don't think I need to post the snarky comments there. Winterz (talk) 19:57, April 28, 2014 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Em dashes are cool, but that's a bit too much. pls fix 1358 (Talk) 19:26, April 15, 2014 (UTC)
501
  • "...where he assigned a promising acolyte to scan several elevated Sith while concerned about them lacking the blood of the original and ancient ones, which he deemed necessary." I don't think the while works here. "As he was" might do the trick.
  • "...that could read a closeby target's blood purity." I think "measure" would be more suited here, instead of "read." 501st dogma(talk) 17:59, May 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done. Thanks for your suggestions. Winterz (talk) 18:59, May 1, 2014 (UTC)
Cav
  • where he assigned a promising acolyte to scan several elevated Sith due to Abaron's concerns about them lacking the blood of the original and ancient ones, - this is a bit unwieldy for stating he was concerned about blood purity. Can you rewrite for clarity? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:13, May 7, 2014 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by AgriCorps 22:36, June 30, 2014 (UTC)
    • How's that now? Winterz (talk) 19:41, May 21, 2014 (UTC)
      • Objecting here because this concerns the same sentence: this still isn't really clear. What did he deem necessary? The blood purity? The scan itself? Might I suggest something like "a trait he deemed necessary" instead of "which he deemed necessary"? 1358 (Talk) 22:13, May 25, 2014 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • "The acolyte completed the task and the results confirmed Abaron's worries and he promised to report them to the Sith's ruling body, the Dark Council." You could use to get rid of an and here.
    • Dude, that was kind of confusing..but I think I've got it now. Look it up.
  • The first sentence of the biography should not all be sourced to the date template.
    • Done.
  • Could you split the last sentence of the bio?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 02:15, June 8, 2014 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • I feel like I'm missing something since no one else has mentioned it, but since this is an optional quest don't you need to include the game mechanics template?Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:18, June 13, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:36, June 30, 2014 (UTC)


  • I wanted to apologize for the time it's been taking me to reply these objections, I've been a really busy bee. Winterz (talk) 08:35, June 24, 2014 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Idle objections over two weeks old. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 02:54, June 22, 2014 (UTC)
    ACvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 02:55, June 22, 2014 (UTC)