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Delevar
- Requested By: Hanzo Hasashi (talk)
- Date Requested: 14:26, 27 March 2023 (UTC)
- Date Archived: 18:51, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
Object
A good amount of the information is extrapolated from the fact that it's unrelatedly specified that the original strike team were Hoth veterans. Yes, he was a Hoth veteran, but unclear if he was one of the original 11 men serving Derlin who were part of the original contingent, or a later member? Thus, the article needs to be rewritten for accuracy.Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 14:26, 27 March 2023 (UTC)- I'm going to be totally honest and say I have absolutely no idea what you are trying to say here. What original contingent are you talking about? If you're referring to a unit under Derlin's command previously that morphed into the strike team, then you need to be specific in your objection and give sources for that if the info is missing. Currently, at no point does the article state one way or another that Delevar had previously been under Derlin's command since that is, to my knowledge, never revealed explicitly. He's at Hoth, yes, but that doesn't mean he directly served under Derlin there. He begins to serve under Derlin at Endor and is part of the strike team from that point on. - Sir Cavalier of One
(Squadron channel) 19:21, 27 March 2023 (UTC)
- Stationed with the Alliance Fleet part. If he was hypothetically one of the later members of the strike team and not initial members, it technically only said the latter was remaining the whole time with the Alliance Fleet.
- So essentially you are only questioning this line? Following the battle, he was stationed with the main Alliance Fleet.[5] which is sourced to Galaxy Guide 5? And I'm really not understanding what distinction you are making between "members of the strike team" and "initial members". They called for volunteers. Delevar volunteered. He became part of the strike team that was assembled. - Sir Cavalier of One(Squadron channel) 18:29, 28 March 2023 (UTC)
- Yes, from my interpretation of the material. The initial volunteers were all with the Alliance fleet, but, as a combination of things pretty much confirm the strike team was more than just the initial 11 volunteers, it doesn't seem clear that all of them were stationed with the Alliance Fleet in the period between the Battle of Hoth and forming the team. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:34, 28 March 2023 (UTC)
- Upon reevalation, seems the information at hand can be applied to all the strike team. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 20:33, 23 May 2023 (UTC)
- Yes, from my interpretation of the material. The initial volunteers were all with the Alliance fleet, but, as a combination of things pretty much confirm the strike team was more than just the initial 11 volunteers, it doesn't seem clear that all of them were stationed with the Alliance Fleet in the period between the Battle of Hoth and forming the team. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:34, 28 March 2023 (UTC)
- So essentially you are only questioning this line? Following the battle, he was stationed with the main Alliance Fleet.[5] which is sourced to Galaxy Guide 5? And I'm really not understanding what distinction you are making between "members of the strike team" and "initial members". They called for volunteers. Delevar volunteered. He became part of the strike team that was assembled. - Sir Cavalier of One
- Stationed with the Alliance Fleet part. If he was hypothetically one of the later members of the strike team and not initial members, it technically only said the latter was remaining the whole time with the Alliance Fleet.
- I'm going to be totally honest and say I have absolutely no idea what you are trying to say here. What original contingent are you talking about? If you're referring to a unit under Derlin's command previously that morphed into the strike team, then you need to be specific in your objection and give sources for that if the info is missing. Currently, at no point does the article state one way or another that Delevar had previously been under Derlin's command since that is, to my knowledge, never revealed explicitly. He's at Hoth, yes, but that doesn't mean he directly served under Derlin there. He begins to serve under Derlin at Endor and is part of the strike team from that point on. - Sir Cavalier of One
2nd edition of GG5 mentions all strike team had certain equipment. This isn't in the current article.Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 14:31, 27 March 2023 (UTC)- My apologies with this one, as I didn't notice that the equipment was all already mentioned in biography. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 02:14, 28 March 2023 (UTC)
Comments
Vote to retain Featured status
Worked a bit on objections via DM on this. Its kinda been idling though, been on the page since March, so I'm satisfied with what it ended up as.—spookywillowwtalk 18:03, 24 July 2023 (UTC)
Lewisr (talk) 18:05, 24 July 2023 (UTC)- Master Fredcerique(talk) (he/him) 17:52, 31 July 2023 (UTC)
