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Clabburn the Elder
- Requested By: ThrawnChiss7
Assembly Cupola - Date Requested: 18:28, 24 February 2024 (UTC)
- Date Archived: 01:54, 13 March 2024 (UTC)
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ThrawnChis
Biography needs subsectioning.19 BBY needs to be mentioned in the body and checked if source really supports it.- The note in the infobox does not mention "decades", and it needs to be mentioned in the body using the same reference. ThrawnChiss7 Assembly Cupola 03:11, 27 February 2024 (UTC)
- Fixed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 03:15, 27 February 2024 (UTC)
- The note in the infobox does not mention "decades", and it needs to be mentioned in the body using the same reference. ThrawnChiss7
Pronouns/gender update.Green skin can be mentioned in the infobox. ThrawnChiss7 Assembly Cupola 18:28, 24 February 2024 (UTC)- Addressed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 02:33, 27 February 2024 (UTC)
Lew
- The intro can be split Lewisr (talk) 17:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- Done.
- Any equipment that can be noted? Lewisr (talk) 17:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- Nope, as interestingly no source material mentions any equipment. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:12, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- There's enough room for an image in the legacy and BTS sections Lewisr (talk) 17:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- Done.
- 'He was rather attractive by Mugaari standards' we don't do phrases like this, so it needs to be reworded to indicate who considered him attractive or be removed entirely Lewisr (talk) 17:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- Exact material said "the last time Clabburn was seen alive he was rather attractive (by Mugaari standards, anyway)." Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:11, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- Such statements, in the rare cases they remain, have to be phrased as "[The person considered themselves] attractive" or "[Some other person] felt that the [subject] was rather attractive. It's much more NPOV to be phrasing it from the point of view in which it comes because it can otherwise come across as objectifying an individual, aside from being something we avoid nowadays. And even if it's mentioned in a source material that isn't from a specific PoV, there is still SA precedent for rewording to be less like that.—spookywillowwtalk 19:35, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- Removed, as the source is not from any perspective seemingly. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:45, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- Such statements, in the rare cases they remain, have to be phrased as "[The person considered themselves] attractive" or "[Some other person] felt that the [subject] was rather attractive. It's much more NPOV to be phrasing it from the point of view in which it comes because it can otherwise come across as objectifying an individual, aside from being something we avoid nowadays. And even if it's mentioned in a source material that isn't from a specific PoV, there is still SA precedent for rewording to be less like that.—spookywillowwtalk 19:35, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- Exact material said "the last time Clabburn was seen alive he was rather attractive (by Mugaari standards, anyway)." Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:11, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- ESB and The Illustrated Star Wars Universe need contextualizing in the BTS Lewisr (talk) 17:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- Context added for the second thing and removed 1st. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
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Vote to retain Featured status
—spookywillowwtalk 22:53, 10 March 2024 (UTC)- Lewisr (talk) 22:54, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
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