- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Zule Xiss
- Nominated by:Darth Trayus
(Trayus Academy) 05:05, November 9, 2009 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:This is another that sat on my back burner for quite some time.
(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
CC7567 (talk) 01:22, January 24, 2010 (UTC)
Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 10:59, January 27, 2010 (UTC)
- Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:24, January 28, 2010 (UTC)
Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 22:08, January 29, 2010 (UTC)
- Her death sounded painful...... --Celtic22 14:56, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
Fine job. Chack Jadson (Talk) 01:50, February 25, 2010 (UTC)
I echo Chack's opinion.—Tommy 9281
(Mechno-chair) 02:22, February 25, 2010 (UTC)
Object
For any Fact File, you have to list exact pages that mention Zule. JangFett (Talk) 19:52, November 9, 2009 (UTC)- This is currently being worked on, as the Fact File note was left over from the original article. I'm trying to find out if this was true or not, and if it is, which one she was mentioned in.Darth Trayus
(Trayus Academy) 21:34, November 9, 2009 (UTC)
- All fact file notations have been added, and added correctly I believe. FYI. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 03:46, January 20, 2010 (UTC)
- This is currently being worked on, as the Fact File note was left over from the original article. I'm trying to find out if this was true or not, and if it is, which one she was mentioned in.Darth Trayus
- Attack of the Clone
Can you give a little more context to the Jabiimi Nationalists in the intro?- Done.
Was Glaive a Master or a Knight? The intro claims the latter, but the "Troubled Padawan" section of the Bio goes with the former.- Master, according to Obi-Wan. It's been fixed.
Can you adjust the "Tragedy on Ohma-D'un" section name to be less POV-oriented? Yes, I know that the Republic and Jedi found it a tragedy, as many readers perhaps will as well, but that doesn't mean that it's viewed as a tragedy to all IU subjects, from whose perspective the article should be written.- Better?
"Durge and Ventress nearly killed Kenobi, but the Jedi Master was saved by a revived Xiss": I don't think he was a Jedi Master, per say, though I'm uncertain; please check this.- You're right. Fixed.
"Using a tactic Skywalker had developed with his Master, the Padawans were able to destroy their attackers and get the convoy moving once more." Can you provide a bit more context here as to what the tactic was?- Give it a try.
Can you get in the introduction of the Jabiimi Nationalists earlier in the Bio? Its relevance where it currently is is a little hazy.- Done.
"Xiss was not so fortunate in her battles with Ventress": watch POV here, please.- This is more of a comparison between her fight against Durge and her fight with Ventress. It's been reworeded to reflect that.
Is there a chance that you can shorten the first paragraph of the Legacy section? Remember, only what's directly relevant should be in there, and while yes, some context is needed to explain how Skywalker got to New Holstice to give Xiss a memory moth, not all of it is necessarily necessary.- I'd disagree here. It's important to note, particularily in the Legacy section, that despite Xiss and the other Padawan's efforts, Skywalker still managed to muck it up. I've made it a bit more explicit, but if you feel it still needs to be shortneded I can do that.
- Other than that, good work. A character I've been looking forward to be promoted for a while. CC7567 (talk) 22:41, January 23, 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for the review. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 23:36, January 23, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
- Stick a fork in this, Zule Xiss has been Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 02:22, February 25, 2010 (UTC)