- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Yos Kolina
- Nominated by: CC7567 (talk) 09:53, August 5, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Part Four of my and Trayus's TCWProject: Politics!
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Support
- Plagueis327 (talk) 17:01, August 5, 2012 (UTC)
Dac. Goddammit, the name is DAC. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 19:00, September 15, 2012 (UTC)- Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 10:03, October 4, 2012 (UTC) 
Yadier Molina? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:50, October 6, 2012 (UTC)- Menkooroo (talk) 08:56, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
- Per IFYLOFD. Nahdar Vebb (talk) 19:18, October 19, 2012 (UTC)
Object
Toprawa
estion, which may affect some punctuation depending on your answer: Is Nossor Ri the Quarren Chieftain, or a Quarren Chieftain?- "The"—adjusted. (Did you mean in the intro, or somewhere else too?)
- I was referring to the biography, but both mentions are punctuated correctly. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:50, October 6, 2012 (UTC)
- "The"—adjusted. (Did you mean in the intro, or somewhere else too?)
I believe the BTS should detail the specific misspellings of his name across canon, bolding each that name that also serves as one of our redirects.- Fixed.
In reference 17, there appears to be a stray period before "Sony Online Entertainment." Please verify correct formatting.Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:51, October 6, 2012 (UTC)- I believe the period looks stray because it comes after the lock image (due to soe.com being an https:// website), but the formatting appears to be correct. Thanks for the review. CC7567 (talk) 20:01, October 6, 2012 (UTC)
- Understood. For that matter, then, I've replaced the external link with our own link for "Sony Online Entertainment," which redirects to our Sony page. I also populated a few additional fields in the cite web template, including the work, being clonewarsadventures.com. If you feel like you want to put an external link in for that, go ahead. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:50, October 6, 2012 (UTC)
- I believe the period looks stray because it comes after the lock image (due to soe.com being an https:// website), but the formatting appears to be correct. Thanks for the review. CC7567 (talk) 20:01, October 6, 2012 (UTC)
Kolina Kolina
In the intro: "Having been integral to his people's peace with the Quarren, Kolina's sudden death left the throne to his young son, Prince Lee-Char." This sentence seems to imply that Lee-Char ascended to the throne because Yos Kolina was peaceful with the Quarren. Can you re-word?- I'm not sure I'm seeing a problem. It's the "sudden death" that left the throne to Lee-Char, not the part about him keeping the peace, and it's worded that way. The dependent clause regarding him being "integral to his people's peace" is connected to Kolina with the current sentence structure, not Lee-Char. CC7567 (talk) 15:24, October 14, 2012 (UTC)
"Kolina was faced with the challenge of unifying Mon Cala's two species" --- this is a bit misleading since Mon Calamari has five sentient species (and tons more non-sentient ones). Can you reword for accuracy?Ref [3] appears twice consecutively in the middle of the first paragraph of "Death and legacy." Should one of them be something else?As a DK Readers book, Ackbar's Underwater Army should be in the "Appearances" section. I'd sofixit but I'm not sure where its starting point is chronologically.Menkooroo (talk) 11:15, October 14, 2012 (UTC)- Regarding some of your changes: Head of State isn't a disambig page, so it needs to be linked. Also, regarding the bolding of the misspellings in the Bts, please see the above discussion with Toprawa. Thanks for the review. CC7567 (talk) 15:24, October 14, 2012 (UTC)
- I've added {{Disambig}} to Head of State now, since it doesn't have any sources or appearances. Regarding the bolding --- what's the basis for bolding outside the intro? The MOS states "The name of the article should be bolded in its first usage in an intro, as should any alternate names mentioned in the intro. (emphasis mine)" Following that directive and not bolding names outside the intro has been standard practice for years. Menkooroo (talk) 15:33, October 14, 2012 (UTC)
- I'll look into the Head of State issue. As for the bolding, I'll get back to you once I talk to Toprawa. CC7567 (talk) 15:49, October 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Head of State could easily be a non-disambig in the same style as mountain; it would just need some sources and appearances. To clarify on the bolding: I take the MOS's statement of "so should any alternate names mentioned in the intro" to mean that only canonical names which are mentioned in the intro should be bolded. The problem with bolding misspellings in the BTS is thus twofold --- not only do they not appear in the intro, but they're also not treated as alternate canonical names. As a comparison on that second point, Darth Caedus's BTS mentions that he was once mistakenly called "Jacen Skywalker" and once "Darth Cadeus," but there's no reason to bold them, as they're presented as simple mistakes rather than alternate names. Menkooroo (talk) 01:14, October 15, 2012 (UTC)
- If a visitor access the page via a redirect, he or she might wonder why they were redirected there, which is why it's been bolded. I don't want to turn this into a big dispute, but it's not covered or prohibited by policy. It makes it easier on the reader to identify the error—for example, if someone read the "Prisoners" guide and used Yolina, they would be able to easily find out why they were brought to the article in question. CC7567 (talk) 01:57, October 15, 2012 (UTC)
- Head of State could easily be a non-disambig in the same style as mountain; it would just need some sources and appearances. To clarify on the bolding: I take the MOS's statement of "so should any alternate names mentioned in the intro" to mean that only canonical names which are mentioned in the intro should be bolded. The problem with bolding misspellings in the BTS is thus twofold --- not only do they not appear in the intro, but they're also not treated as alternate canonical names. As a comparison on that second point, Darth Caedus's BTS mentions that he was once mistakenly called "Jacen Skywalker" and once "Darth Cadeus," but there's no reason to bold them, as they're presented as simple mistakes rather than alternate names. Menkooroo (talk) 01:14, October 15, 2012 (UTC)
- I'll look into the Head of State issue. As for the bolding, I'll get back to you once I talk to Toprawa. CC7567 (talk) 15:49, October 14, 2012 (UTC)
- I've added {{Disambig}} to Head of State now, since it doesn't have any sources or appearances. Regarding the bolding --- what's the basis for bolding outside the intro? The MOS states "The name of the article should be bolded in its first usage in an intro, as should any alternate names mentioned in the intro. (emphasis mine)" Following that directive and not bolding names outside the intro has been standard practice for years. Menkooroo (talk) 15:33, October 14, 2012 (UTC)
Comments
- Currently 1,616 words. My third attempt at writing another GAN. (I failed.) CC7567 (talk) 09:53, August 5, 2012 (UTC)
- A better, colored infobox image is potentially on its way, if I can scan it well enough from Ackbar's Underwater Army. CC7567 (talk) 09:53, August 5, 2012 (UTC)
- Could I convince you to use Mon Calamari instead of "Mon Cala"? :P JangFett (Talk) 04:40, August 6, 2012 (UTC)
- Another question, now that I think of it. The Sources list treats that SW.com Iceberg Three external link as his first mention. However, as his name is not directly mentioned within that article, that should really be treated as a {{1sm}} {{Imo}}. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:54, October 6, 2012 (UTC)
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 02:35, October 20, 2012 (UTC)