Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Yashuvhu/Legends

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Yashuvhu

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total)

Support

1. As nominator. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 23:50, 6 February 2008 (UTC)
2. A splendid little read. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:58, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
3. Havac 05:31, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
4. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 20:27, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
5. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 23:59, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
6. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 02:45, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
7. Ya, shuvhu, ya. Gonk ^(Gonk!) 19:19, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
8. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 14:22, 17 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

1. Toprawa:
   • Relate this to something more specific. Sometime prior to the Galactic Civil War, for ex: "Sometime in the past, Human settlers had landed..."
     • Related. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 00:36, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
   • Remove era tags. Inappropriate for a planet.
     • Removed. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 00:36, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
   • Same thing with this phrase. Millennia past when? "...in the millennia past..."
     • Reworded. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 00:36, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
     • After reading the BTS, I see that the dates I am asking for are left a bit fuzzy, but see what you can do. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:28, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
       • Yeah, it is very vague. I really, really wish something was more concrete to pin upon. Thanks for the input! Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 00:36, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
   • The first paragraph of the history needs to be reordered. You should deal with the colonization and then the Jedi, not start in the middle, work your way back, and pick up again. Havac 19:49, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
     • Reordered. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 05:28, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
   • The part about Luke setting course for it and then discovering it in the library is really odd. While FH may have dropped the ball itself, I have to think this could be smoothed out a little more. Havac 19:49, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
     • Reworked. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 05:28, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
2. From the desk of Atarumaster88
   • The description section is really choppy and could really use some more detail if it's available.
     • There isn't any more information, but I tried to smoothen out what is there and available. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 05:28, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
   • The segment about the Chiss segment is somewhat fragmented also. A bit more explanation on what happened would be good.
     • Smoothened. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 05:42, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
   • You state the Jedi who landed there was Human, and later you say he was "believed to be Human." Which is it? Whatever it is, please clarify.
     • Fixed, I believe. He was Human according to Yashuvhi legend. I think I have indicated that consistently now. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 05:28, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
   • A bit more detail on the Imperial contact team please. If an Imperial contact team landed on the planet, it's a good idea to explicitly state so.
     • No mention of actual contact. I rephrased the mention in the Bts to reflect this. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 05:28, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
   • Why do you need quotes around nonhostile?
     • Specific label, but nevertheless eradicated. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 05:28, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
   • Ditto on Prophetess. If it's her title, you don't need to place quotes around it.
     • Removed. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 05:28, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
   • Slightly underdone, IMHO. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 20:49, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
     • Unfortunately, that is the nature of the planet. I've scavenged everything looking for even a mention. All that is seen is all that there is; I truly wish I could say otherwise. If you feel there isn't enough content for FA, then we can discuss pulling it down. The article has been improved that is the most important. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 05:28, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
       • If it's long enough for FA, I can't fault it. Maybe Abel or someone will come up with some more detail on this world though. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 20:27, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
3. From the Chron-o-John of Green Tentacle:
   • Old Republic era is OOU publishing era so no linky please.
     • Delinkied. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 04:29, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
   • Third paragraph of history has some short sentences that might read better if combined.
     • Reconfigured. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 04:29, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
   • "In the process of their research, Skywalker discovered the teachings of Valara Saar. Also included in the Cheunh text was how the Chiss had been expelled from the planet by the Prophetess known as Valara Saar." Overdoing her name a bit.
     • Simplified. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 04:29, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
   • I also agree with Ataru that you need to make something of the Imperials knowing about it in the history section. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 23:04, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
     • I'm sorry to report, but there is absolutely nothing that I can find anywhere that states anything other than what is in the article. All that the text of Force Heretic: Remnant states is the quote that heads the History section. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 04:29, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
       • You should still mention it though. Even if it's just "The planet was largely, though not entirely, forgotten by the broader galactic community by the time of the Yuuzhan Vong War. Listed as nonhostile by Imperial first-contact specialists, the coordinates of the planet were later available to R2-D2 in 28 ABY during the hunt for Zonama Sekot." Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 19:03, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
         • Meh, forget it. I still think the information could be jiggled chronologically to make a little more of it but I can't be bothered to hold it up over it. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 14:22, 17 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 14:24, 17 February 2008 (UTC)

StarNeptune:

• I would love to see a few pics in there, although it is not required. If you can't find anything, don't worry about it.
  • Added the one of Valara Saar that exists. That's the only directly relating picture.Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 00:36, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
• "When the Chiss tried to approach her residence in the mountains uninvited, they were forced away by her formidable techniques." -- I'm unclear on what these "techniques" are...did she use the Force on them, or are they lightsaber combat techniques?
  • Is this better? Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 00:36, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
• A quote at the top of the article would be good, if one can be found.
  • Unfortunately, there are no quotes about the planet that are IU. Everything that is said about it is OoU or narrative. I added the one, blanket statement by Luke Skywalker about rediscovering the planet, but I'd almost rather it not be in the article. Let me know. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 00:36, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
    • Actually, I misspoke. There were two. I added them. Thanks! Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 01:59, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
• Other than that, I see have no major objections. StarNeptune^{Talk to me!} 07:04, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
  • Thanks for looking at it, Star. Master Aban Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 00:36, 8 February 2008 (UTC)