Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/XoXaan

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XoXaan

  • Nomination comments:Twicebaked.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. -- Harrar 22:53, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote "And cut your nails!" Thefourdotelipsis 22:11, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 07:28, 20 April 2009 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:08, 20 April 2009 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 20:36, 20 April 2009 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Lord Hydronium 22:32, 20 April 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. Hi Tommy. Nice article just a few things.
    • "the error of their ways" seems POV - I'm guessing this is what the Jedi wished them to do?
      • Addressed, how's that?
    • Can we quantify, though perhaps not exactly, the amount of years that passed between XoXaan's death and Hett's arrival? I.e, over 4,000 or just under 13,000 etc.
      • Addressed.
    • Is there a link to Hett's "shattering" of the door - a certain Force power?
      • Addressed.
    • Ah, the Yuuzhan Vong. I know this is straying from relevance but when you say he was captured by the "extragalactic" Yuuzhan Vong it is ambiguous whether or not he left the galaxy himself. Can you mention the fact that they were scouting the Unknown Regions or something? See what you think.
      • Addressed.
    • "Merely anyone" in the P&T seems tautological in its context. Can we reword?
      • Addressed.
    • "Lesser beings" can probably be reworded to sound less POV, I imagine :P
      • Addressed.
    • That's all. Interesting stoof. -- Harrar 22:45, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
      • Thank you sir, for the review. Please advise if anything further is required. I look forward to future interactions between us;)—Tommy Dark side Master SWGTCG (Nine two eight one) 20:51, 10 April 2009 (UTC)
  2. "After Hett assumed the mantle of Dark Lord of the Sith under the moniker Darth Krayt, he constructed a massive statue in reverence of XoXaan—his first and greatest teacher—within the Temple of the Sith on the planet Coruscant." - "Greatest" is leaning towards POVerty, and first Sith teacher. He had Jedi ones before that. :P Also, some mention of Vergere might be good, but if it proves too tangetial, fuhgeddaboudit. Thefourdotelipsis 02:35, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
    • Addressed, though I refrained from things Vergere, because I felt it would straying a bit far. Thanks for the review, .....Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy Dark side Master SWGTCG (Nine two eight one) 06:31, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
  3. The last few sentences of "Legacy" stray a little too much much from XoXaan. Cut it off at Krayt being entombed there. Also, the BTS might do with a note about how Jan Duursema (7/12/07 5:44pm) first confirmed the capitalization and pronunciation of it. It might also be worth noting how her appearance in Vector connected her to Vector's villain Karness Muur. - Lord Hydronium 06:06, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
    • Addressed the Legacy part. I'll fix the BtS when I get to a real pc.—Tommy Dark side Master SWGTCG (Nine two eight one) 06:31, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
      • Addressed the pronunciation part, though I am unsure if I created the reftag properly. Please review that for me and tweak if necessary? Thanks, Hydro.—Tommy Dark side Master SWGTCG (Nine two eight one) 19:34, 20 April 2009 (UTC)
        • I can fix the ref, but I think the BTS part needs to be rejiggered. First, the Vongerella thing is pretty extraneous, since it's clear she's not. Second, I'd put it in the right chronological order in the first paragraph; I forget what issue the discussion was after, but talk about it after you talk about that one. Third, as I mentioned, that was also where Jan confirmed it was spelled "XoXaan" (all its mentions in the comics were in all caps), which I feel is worth a note since no one knew how to spell it before then. - Lord Hydronium 20:19, 20 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:52, 20 April 2009 (UTC)