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Wrobie Tyce

  • Nominated by: JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 04:35, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I get two FAN slots now! Shodu has been bumped back in the schedule so here's one for WP:PRIDE :)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:PRIDE, WP:NOVELS

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Support

  1. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 13:57, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
  2. Very nice work! Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:16, 6 December 2021 (UTC)
  3. Tomeito 16:09, 16 February 2022 (UTC)
  4. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 08:19, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote OOM 224 17:57, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote No relation to Obie Trice? Commander Code-8 Hello There! 07:07, 21 May 2022 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Imperators II(Talk) 18:32, 26 May 2022 (UTC)

Object

Ayrehead
  • Initial stuff, I think the intro could be about a paragraph longer with a little more detail on stuff like the battle since you don't even currently mention who they're fighting anywhere. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:23, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
    • Expanded the second one, how's that?
      • I'd add the Leia mourning scene mentioned below. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:00, 3 December 2021 (UTC)
        • Added.
  • I'd say there's room for a couple more pictures in the body, subsections with three paragraphs can generally support two. A shot of her at one of the meetings would be good. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:23, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
    • I'll grab one or two when I get home.
    • Added one, not really another I can add for the Exegol section since there's nothing but her in the cockpit. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 04:37, 19 November 2021 (UTC)
      • The Leia info might allow for that first subection to be split, which should hopefully leave room for a mourning image. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:00, 3 December 2021 (UTC)
        • Even with the split I'm not seeing room, unfortunately.
  • Others might disagree, so I'm happy to discuss this, but I personally think it's worth including that the kissing scene was cut for some international audiences. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:23, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
  • That definietly is Wrobie stood with Aarton Chireen next to Leia's body during the mourning scene. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:00, 3 December 2021 (UTC)
    • Done.
  • I think the equipment section can be fleshed out a bit more. You should add colors to the items listed (the orange is "interstellar orange" per Jess's entry in the TFA VD) and is there a source that ID's the Resistance X-wing uniform's as a flak vest? The Character Encyclopedia and TFA VD always seem to refer to it as a flight vest. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:00, 3 December 2021 (UTC)
  • You mention the Falcon at the beginning of the Battle for Exegol section without having previously established what it is or why they'd expect it to be there. I'd probably add a sentence to the planning session part stating that the Falcon was being sent to find reinforcements. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:44, 6 December 2021 (UTC)
Tomeito
  • In TROS Expanded Edition, there is a description of Tyce flying a Y-wing. Right after they arrive at Exegol. Of course, I think this is a mistake for the A-wing, but shouldn't the article explain about it? Tomeito 12:00, 4 February 2022 (UTC)
Braha
  • D'Qar needs context in the intro and Fabrin in the bio.
    • Added.
  • I'd like to see the First Order worked into the first bio section more since there's no indication of what the Resistance is against and what the retreat of D'Qar is from. Heck, they're technically not mentioned till the last bit. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 00:26, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
OOM
  • The article would benefit from slipping in a mention that D'Acy spent years defending the Warlentta system, per her Databank entry. That way, readers would get a better sense of the context around the couple's relationship at Warlentta. I think you can restructure the first sentence of the Biography section to do this.
    • Sure, done.
  • Card Trader went out of its way to point out that D'Acy was personally recruited by Leia, so I think that's valuable context for the body as well.
    • Added, glad I noticed that the DB does too so I didn't have to mess around with CT. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:52, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
  • The article mentions Tyce flying her starfighter in the first Biography section, but it doesn't specify that it was an A-wing until later on.
    • Moved that mention.
  • "it was revealed that" — would be wise to avoid passive voice here, since it could seem like you're narrating from an OOU perspective.
    • Nice catch, I wrote this before I was careful about passive voice.
  • Also, it'd be nice to clarify that the mentioned events took place on Ajan Kloss somewhere in the same paragraph.
    • Added.
  • I'd say it's clearer to give the context for Finn as a Resistance member rather than as a former stormtrooper. When you mention Jannah later on, maybe you can say that she's Finn's crewmate?
    • I mean, they're all Resistance members, no? :P I think using it for context repeatedly can get a little repetitive. Jannah context fixed, though.
      • Fair OOM 224 17:57, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Not sure if there's really a need to mention Rey. At least Seftin Vanik doesn't.
    • I don't think it hurts, especially since these pilots directly benefited from her intel.
  • I know you like the Mon Cals, but there really isn't a need to mention Aftab's species :P
    • I'm going to disagree - people unfamiliar with the names of the various pilots might not know which one he is without that mention.
      • Good point OOM 224 17:57, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Given that flying through asteroid fields was such a big deal in the OT, I think it's worth mentioning that in Skills and abilities.
    • Sure thing.
  • As it currently stands, the final BTS paragraph treats the censorship as the main subject. I think it's better to reword it so that it simply supplements the kiss notably being the first of its kind in Star Wars.
  • Note: I reorganised P&T a bit during my copy-edit, since it makes more sense to me to make the split between her friendly face and her more aggressive side rather than suddenly making a paragraph break while detailing her support for Poe. OOM 224 16:56, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
CC-8
Extremely per CC-8's support comment
  • Hmm, I suppose technically the Resistance being victorious of the Xystons, not just the Steadfast, is intro-exclusive.
    • Added.
  • "Tyce and the Resistance starfighters flew to Exegol using instructions provided by the Jedi-in-training Rey." — do you think "directions" would be more appropriate than "instructions" here? Imperators II(Talk) 11:32, 26 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 18:32, 26 May 2022 (UTC)