Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Wolf Sazen

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Wolf Sazen

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 16:44, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
2. Objections/Comments resolved via IRC. Greyman ^(Talk) 23:00, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
3. Graestan^(Talk) 23:21, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
4. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 00:03, 4 April 2008 (UTC)
5. Always a pleasure to read one of Acky's noms. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:00, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
6. Jaina Solo^(Talk) 22:16, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
7. Imperialles 22:35, 6 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

1. From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
   • Could a different image be used for the infobox? Big speech bubbles aren't my thing.
     • Me neither, but I've been hard pressed to find a better image. The only other options are the images in the "A quest begins" section or the bodyshot one from Legacy 0, neither of which really appeal to me. I'll look into it, anyway.
   • Vao and Fel being persecuted by Darth Talon is set up twice.
     • Fixed.
   • Explain what a coralskipper is.
     • Done.
   • Graestan^(Talk) 19:55, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
2. Toprawa:
   • This doesn't quite make sense to me. Is there any way being his peer would make him not have respect? "and held considerable respect for him even as his peer"
     • Reworded.
   • Please go through and do a better job of linking appropriate things. Coruscant, Emperor, Prosthetic etc.
     • Linked the listed examples and anything else I noticed.
   • Please elaborate on why he is showing them leniency: "Roan Fel, the Emperor, guaranteed not to strike at the Jedi as they all returned to Ossus under Kol Skywalker's orders."
     • Elaborated.
   • Please reword this sentence. You use the same structure "---, though, ---" in the sentence before this. "The Zabrak himself was calm, though,"
     • Reworded.
   • Please reword. The second clause makes the entire phrase awkward: "Realizing that his apprentice had almost touched the dark side, Sazen warned him not to,"
     • Reworded/clarified.
   • And, please, finish off the remainder of that sentence. Just reads awkwardly: "telling Cade that it would only further corrupt him to fight the Sith."
     • Reworded a tad.
   • Please reword to avoid using the "though" structure too often: "and he was left extremely grief-stricken, though he eventually overcame this."
   • Per the recently passed CT, please move the article this is linked to to "Unidentified" rather than "Unknown": "and another"
     • Culator has moved it, though I'd like to point out that this has absolutely nothing to do with Sazen's article.
   • Please reword. Avoid lazy generalizing: "arrival of around half a dozen Sith"
     • Addressed.
   • "Intercepted" seems a bit out of place here. Please choose a more formal word for "crashed": "who had somehow learned of the meeting and had intercepted it"
     • Altered it a bit.
   • What is this "Hand"? Please explain and give context: "Vao wished to hunt down the Hand on Vendaxa"
     • Changed wording.
   • Please reword to avoid overuse of "though": "arrived in ships, though Sith reinforcements had followed them"
     • I can't find this sentence. It may have been reworded already by someone else. Please point me toward it if this is not the case.
       • Can't find it either. Disregard. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:00, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
   • Please give this some context. This is never explained previously: "Draco wanted them to leave immediately so Princess Fel's injuries could be treated"
     • Contextualized.
   • Avoid overusing "though": " though Fel's condition was rapidly deteriorating."
     • Tweaked a bit.
   • Ditto: "Sazen tried to talk to his former apprentice, though Skywalker sent him away."
     • Addressed.
     • Apologies for the incomplete review, but I will finish this up at a later time. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:47, 31 March 2008 (UTC)
       • No worries. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 23:53, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
         • Good job addressing the objections, Acky. Thanks. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:00, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
3. From the Undisclosed Location of Darth Culator:
   • Intro quote needs a more specific source.
     • Done.
   • File:Sazen Daluuj.jpg needs a more specific source.
     • Done.
   • Biography/Jedi Master heading has no quote and every other section has one. This feels wrong.
   • That's it for now. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 19:18, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
     • Quote added. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 23:53, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
4. File:WolfSazen.jpg is quite blurry. --Imperialles 18:54, 4 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 23:11, 6 April 2008 (UTC)

• Will be updated when new material comes out, et cetra. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 16:44, 26 March 2008 (UTC)