- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Waxer
- Nominated by: QuiGonJinn
(Talk) 19:54, September 15, 2009 (UTC) - Nomination comments: More clones.
(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
CC7567 (talk) 18:30, December 20, 2009 (UTC)- Yay, more clones! Kreivi Wolter 19:36, December 21, 2009 (UTC)
- Nice work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 16:38, December 27, 2009 (UTC)
IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:28, December 29, 2009 (UTC)- Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:50, January 11, 2010 (UTC)
- Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:28, January 12, 2010 (UTC)
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Have you checked all sources, including Ultimate Battles as well as The Battle for Ryloth and all other possible young reader books for information and appearances?CC7567 (talk) 20:11, September 15, 2009 (UTC)- Umm, I actually asked you to check the guide a while ago :P; The Battle for Ryloth adapts "Liberty on Ryloth" only; AFAIK, there are no young reader books based on Innocents of Ryloth yet. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 20:20, September 15, 2009 (UTC)
- Oh yeah. But as for the book, no, "Liberty on Ryloth" is not the only episode it adapts. Please check it. CC7567 (talk) 20:34, September 15, 2009 (UTC)
- Addressed. Thanks to Jang for the info. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 18:04, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
- Addressed. Thanks to Jang for the info. QuiGonJinn
- Oh yeah. But as for the book, no, "Liberty on Ryloth" is not the only episode it adapts. Please check it. CC7567 (talk) 20:34, September 15, 2009 (UTC)
- Umm, I actually asked you to check the guide a while ago :P; The Battle for Ryloth adapts "Liberty on Ryloth" only; AFAIK, there are no young reader books based on Innocents of Ryloth yet. QuiGonJinn
- How could I ignore a clone nom? :P
In the intro, you say he participated in the Battle of Kiros; however, I'm seeing no information about it. I'm seeing only Ryloth.- IMO, detailed information about the battle is not essential to the intro; that's what the biography is for.
- Yes; however, if you mention something in the bio that is fairly important to Waxer, then you should mention it in the intro. But straight-to-the-point.
- If that is the case, then Kiros is mentioned "straight-to-the-point:" Waxer fought alongside Jedi Generals Obi-Wan Kenobi and Anakin Skywalker at a battle on the Togrutan colony world of Kiros. I thought you were asking me to expand that part :P
- Oh, no. :P
- If that is the case, then Kiros is mentioned "straight-to-the-point:" Waxer fought alongside Jedi Generals Obi-Wan Kenobi and Anakin Skywalker at a battle on the Togrutan colony world of Kiros. I thought you were asking me to expand that part :P
- Yes; however, if you mention something in the bio that is fairly important to Waxer, then you should mention it in the intro. But straight-to-the-point.
- IMO, detailed information about the battle is not essential to the intro; that's what the biography is for.
{{Fact}} tag in the bio.- The date is sourced to the comic. It's introductory page states: "The events in this story take place approximately twenty-two years before the Battle of Yavin."
- Good catch; I forgot about that one. :P
- The date is sourced to the comic. It's introductory page states: "The events in this story take place approximately twenty-two years before the Battle of Yavin."
Mention about Waxer's origins as a clone. Because this is a clone article, it is crucial that you mention about Kamino, and then mention about Waxer serving under CC-2224 and Obi-Wan.- It was removed per this precedent.
- No; Qui-Gon for larger scale clone articles, it is best if you do mention Waxer's origins. That article may have past in the GAN page, but you need to thoroughly describe his existence as a clone here.
- Whatever; added.
- No; Qui-Gon for larger scale clone articles, it is best if you do mention Waxer's origins. That article may have past in the GAN page, but you need to thoroughly describe his existence as a clone here.
- It was removed per this precedent.
"Although the battle was ultimately won by the Republic, it was discovered that all the Togrutas had mysteriously disappeared." Quite confusing. So the Republic "ultimately" won because the Togrutas disappeared? IIRC, the Confederacy took the Togrutas, although it's not mentioned in the article.- Tweaked/Expanded.
While this is a factual error: "Utilizing the Marg Sabl maneuver, Anakin Skywalker and Ahsoka Tano were able to destroy the Separatist blockade surrounding the planet, allowing the Republic forces to land and initiate ground assault." it needs some minor tweaking. Ahsoka suggested its use, and you failed to mention about the Resolute's role in the maneuver. To the average reader, who may not know what the maneuver is, it's best to mention about the Star Destroyer.- Is all that really essential? This article is not about the battle of Ryloth in general, it's about Waxer. All that the reader needs to know is that the Republic won the space battle and began ground assault. If said reader wants to know more about the maneuver, he just has to click on the link.
- Then it's best if you leave "Marg Sabl" out, and just mention about Anakin and Ahsoka's success; allowing the troops to land.
- OK, removed.
- Then it's best if you leave "Marg Sabl" out, and just mention about Anakin and Ahsoka's success; allowing the troops to land.
- Is all that really essential? This article is not about the battle of Ryloth in general, it's about Waxer. All that the reader needs to know is that the Republic won the space battle and began ground assault. If said reader wants to know more about the maneuver, he just has to click on the link.
"Soon, however, Numa ran away in the direction of the recon droid, and Waxer decided to follow her, much to Boil's dismay." Either I've missed read something, or you forgot you mention about this "recon droid". Why was Boil negative about Waxer's decision?- The droid was mentioned before: As the two started to argue, Waxer spotted a Separatist recon droid flying nearby. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 05:48, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- The droid was mentioned before: As the two started to argue, Waxer spotted a Separatist recon droid flying nearby. QuiGonJinn
"tooka doll" cannot be sourced to the episode; because it was never mentioned by name. Have you checked the guide?- Addressed, along with Nilim Bril, who wasn't mentioned by name either.
- Nice work, Qui-Gon. :) JangFett (Talk) 21:53, October 12, 2009 (UTC)
- Thank you. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 12:12, October 15, 2009 (UTC)
- Thank you. QuiGonJinn
Needs update for Landing at Point Rain along with Boil. Not that they do much. I suspect they were put in the episode just to annoy us all. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 01:34, November 5, 2009 (UTC)- Yeah, that was a very unexpected and kinda useless appearance. Updated. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 14:04, November 8, 2009 (UTC)
- There might be enough to warrant an Equipment section with his new armor that he used on Geonosis. In any case, you still need to add that part about his Geonosis/ARF armor to the article. CC7567 (talk) 17:54, November 8, 2009 (UTC)
- OK, I'll do so. One question, though. Do we have an article for this type of armor, and if not, does it warrant a redlink? QuiGonJinn (Talk) 18:23, November 8, 2009 (UTC)
- Possibly link it to the original Advanced Recon Force trooper article. While I don't think giving it a separate article is necessary, perhaps creating a subsection within the ARF trooper article. JangFett (Talk) 18:29, November 8, 2009 (UTC)
- Should be fully addressed now. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 11:01, November 9, 2009 (UTC)
- Should be fully addressed now. QuiGonJinn
- Possibly link it to the original Advanced Recon Force trooper article. While I don't think giving it a separate article is necessary, perhaps creating a subsection within the ARF trooper article. JangFett (Talk) 18:29, November 8, 2009 (UTC)
- OK, I'll do so. One question, though. Do we have an article for this type of armor, and if not, does it warrant a redlink? QuiGonJinn
- There might be enough to warrant an Equipment section with his new armor that he used on Geonosis. In any case, you still need to add that part about his Geonosis/ARF armor to the article. CC7567 (talk) 17:54, November 8, 2009 (UTC)
- Yeah, that was a very unexpected and kinda useless appearance. Updated. QuiGonJinn
- Minor stuff from the clone
Why did Waxer follow Numa? I'm pretty sure he said it himself during the episode.- Addressed.
"Waxer then told Boil that it would be better if they hurried back to the Republic position. As well as, claiming they ran into trouble, and their communications had been jammed." Please smooth this out somehow; it's extremely choppy.- Addressed.
The episode is not a source for the markings on Waxer's helmet being that of kills.- Can't find a source. Fixed, I guess.
Can the Bts be organized better? I don't really see why you have to go through all the extra wording just to get the television episode appearances mentioned first when the comic was released first anyway.- Addressed.
- Good work otherwise. CC7567 (talk) 04:01, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review, CC. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 12:41, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review, CC. QuiGonJinn
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 19:28, January 12, 2010 (UTC)
- I understand that it's been two weeks since CC objected, so I want to inform that I'm still working on addressing his objection. However, if the Inqs consider my noms idle, I have nothing against their removal. In that case, I'll just re-nominate Waxer and Boil after the book is checked. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 19:13, September 30, 2009 (UTC)
- I hate the NDS Republic Heroes :P QuiGonJinn (Talk) 12:12, October 15, 2009 (UTC)
- I hate the NDS Republic Heroes :P QuiGonJinn