Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Warto

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Warto

  • Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 03:06, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Something interesting, I'm sure.

(1 Inqs/0 Users/1 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote --Eyrezer 04:41, August 13, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Hunter's comments

  • From the lead: "In turn, he was abandoned by his crew on Aduba-3, where he was forced to eke out a new existence lifting crates and strong-boxes at the local starport, while also finding the time to mug any of the weaker locals." The latter part of this sentence ("while also finding the time") didn't read as very encyclopedic to me, and I found it kind of distracting. I'd change it to something like, "...at the local spaceport, where he also mugged many of the weaker locals" or something like that.
  • Also in the lead: "One evening, Warto decided that the Wroonian Azoora was in fact his girlfriend." This, too, struck me as a bit unencyclopedic. I'd suggest something more like, "One evening, Warto wrongfully convinced himself the Wroonian Azoora was his girlfriend."
  • Near the end: "Warto was dismounted by Chewbacca, who then killed the Boltrunian." Could you just briefly specify how Chewbacca killed him?
  • "Amongst Warto's skills was the ability to speak, read, and write Basic." Is this sentence really necessary? Unless I'm missing something, Basic could very well be this species' main language. The page Boltrunian doesn't say anything about language at all, and the only other Boltrunian there seems to be is Maw, who also spoke Basic...

That'd be it, aside from the need for more photos, which I see you're not able to do yourself. I'll have to check if I have these issues lying around somewhere... — Hunter Kahn 23:45, September 7, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

  • If any image gurus feel like illustrating the article, please go ahead. I do not have the facilities to do so myself. Thefourdotelipsis 03:06, July 14, 2010 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Idle objections of three weeks. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:08, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Cylka-talk- 18:14, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 19:38, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 20:01, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk)