- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Vost Tyne
- Nominated by: Xicer9
(Combadge) 00:24, April 10, 2010 (UTC) - Nomination comments: Have some Tyne to review my article?
(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
CC7567 (talk) 05:14, April 15, 2010 (UTC)- Gotta love stereotypical villains. :) ~ SavageBob 05:59, April 29, 2010 (UTC)
- Very nice. Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 23:57, May 7, 2010 (UTC) - Didn't have very high aspirations, though. Chack Jadson (Talk) 15:00, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
- Good job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:40, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
- IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:10, May 13, 2010 (UTC)
Object
One really minor thing: can you mention D-3P-O2 somewhere in the bio instead of exclusively in the P&T? It's relevant there, too.CC7567 (talk) 05:00, April 15, 2010 (UTC)- Prepare to the savaged...
Does the Empire "nationalize" things? Idunno; it just sounds weird, since the Empire is much larger than a "nation."- It's the wording the book uses, but I changed it to "taken over" anyway.
Can you replace every third or fourth instance of the word "Rebels" with a synonym (like Alliance operatives or something)? This is the one area where I found the prose a bit repetitive.- Done.
Because much of his biography reflects an RPG scenario, shouldn't there be templates to signify that events don't necessarily go down this way? The only reason this wouldn't be necessary is if the path you've presented her has been canonized as official in some other source, like one of the encyclopedias.- I've added it to the second section of the Bio, since that's where player decisions come in.
The aspiring Jedi killed by Tyne should probably have at least a stub of an article, even if he or she is unnamed.- Created and linked.
"the plant had been working at only twenty-five of its total capacity"... 25 percent?- Fixed.
"The Empire, however, demanded nothing less than one-hundred percent production capacity, and ordered Linden to bring production up to maximum capacity." This is a bit repetitive, since they demand 100% and order him to produce 100%, which seems like the same thing said twice in a row.- Removed the first part.
Secretary droid redirects to CZ-series communications/business droid, but seeing as how D-3P-O2 is another example of the type, it should probably be linked to from this article as its own article.- Created a stub for secretary droid, linked it in the article.
Please move the images so they don't interfere with the quotes (moving the image code below the quote codes).- Moved.
"nothing short of a slaughter for the Sekct" -- This is a bit ambiguous. I know you mean the Sekct would be slaughtered, but it could be interpreted the other way. Can you reword?- Reworded.
Can you include some note in BTS of who illustrated Tyne for the adventure? That's it. Excellent work. ~ SavageBob 04:26, April 29, 2010 (UTC)
- Toprawa:
Would it be appropriate to leave a link for this battle that takes place?- Added a redlink, I'll try to create a stub for it soon.
- It seems like it could be linked to in the intro as well. I'll strike this for now, but please take care of it. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:40, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
- Added a redlink, I'll try to create a stub for it soon.
Also, this shouldn't be considered a formal objection since there really isn't any policy mandating its use, but I would prefer you use the citeweb template for your external link references. I think it just looks better and allows us to show the original archived version of the link.Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:08, May 11, 2010 (UTC)- Added the template, although I couldn't find any archived links for the pages. Xicer9(Combadge) 18:34, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
- Yeah, doesn't seem to be anything on Internet Archive, which is annoying. Thanks. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:40, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
- Added the template, although I couldn't find any archived links for the pages. Xicer9
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 02:08, May 13, 2010 (UTC)