Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Volik

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Volik

  • Nominated by: Imperators II(Talk) 16:48, January 18, 2016 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: "Are you tired of your stressful life in the Core? Then come visit our wonderful resort on Volik! Hunt bountiful game, engage in a challenging climbing experience, and dine on exotic food! Updated: Please beware of the local pirates and smugglers, it appears they are very active this season."

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

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Support

  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 01:18, June 4, 2016 (UTC)
  2. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 23:48, February 4, 2017 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Excellent work. This is why I love Star Wars canon. An utterly minor and insignificant topic given minute level of historical detail. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:12, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 19:22, August 31, 2017 (UTC)
  5. Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:02, October 11, 2017 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 17:54, October 15, 2017 (UTC)

Object

SE
  • Can you add the system into the intro?
    • Added, although I really think it's unnecessary.
  • "Wildlife on the planet included predators that stalked their prey on the plains" Do we know what kinds of predators, or does it just refer to predators in general?
    • The source just mentions "predators", birds & other flying creatures, and the herbivore reyko. Imperators II(Talk) 06:43, February 2, 2017 (UTC)
  • Is there an article for Vader's attack on Volik? Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:56, February 2, 2017 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I think it would be better for this sentence to specify who discovered it: "...the mask of Darth Nihilus, which was ultimately discovered in the remains of the Nashuaga." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:12, August 28, 2017 (UTC)
    • Added.
  • I regretfully feel I need to suspend my review in order for you to handle this objection before I proceed further. Twelve of the Bio's fifteen paragraphs start out with virtually the exact same wording: "Around this time," "During that time," "At some point," "During the reign," etc. It gets really repetitive after a while. Please find different ways to vary how these paragraphs start out. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:54, August 28, 2017 (UTC)
    • I guess that's a common pitfall when writing about many short, unrelated events. Should be okay now, please take a look. Imperators II(Talk) 13:59, August 29, 2017 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Intro: "Around that time, the freighter Nashuaga..." The previous paragraph mentions four millennia before the Battle of Yavin and the centuries that follow. The introduction doesn't really make it clear when exactly this occurs.
    • Changed.
  • Infobox: For the affiliations, I don't really think that you should have formerly included. Everything could technically be considered formerly in the Star Wars universe.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 01:24, October 12, 2017 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 17:54, October 15, 2017 (UTC)