Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Unidentified Dulok (O)

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Unidentified Dulok (O)

  • Nominated by: ~SavageBOB sig 12:08, August 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another unnamed Dulok with several appearances. Maybe Insider will do a "Rogues Gallery" on the Duloks sometime. ~SavageBOB sig 12:08, August 26, 2013 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:15, September 23, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Some of it is perilously close to PBP, but no hanging offence. One of the great villains of all time! Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 06:04, October 4, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Protectorate (talk) 23:21, November 26, 2013 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:08, December 14, 2013 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:30, December 16, 2013 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 06:51, January 8, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  • distinguished himself from the other swamp dwellers by marking his green fur with a yellow O. - is there evidence he marked himself and the O is not a natural coloration? The rest of the article seems to suggest he was just marked, not that he marked himself.
  • Is there any reason you italicise the Xs and Os in the article? - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 07:55, August 28, 2013 (UTC)
    • "Castaways of Endor" says that Duloks painted, branded, and shaved markings into their fur, and the illustration for that article shows a couple Duloks with yellow markings similar to O's and obviously (IMO) derived from the yellow-marked characters in the cartoon. I suppose I should cite "Castaways of Endor" for this? And the italicization is because I'm using "words as words" (or in this case, "letters as letters." That is, I'm talking about the letter O, not the word "O," as in, "O, to be a Dulok!" Does that make sense? ~SavageBOB sig 11:49, August 28, 2013 (UTC)
    • On second thought, I've reworded the lead to just say he had the yellow O, not to say where he got it. I'd be comfortable saying it wasn't natural based on "Castaways of Endor," but we're not losing anything by being a bit vague about it. ~SavageBOB sig 11:56, August 28, 2013 (UTC)
El Jefe
  • "As the shaman lied to save face, the two Dulok guards failed to stifle their reactions of disbelief" Why would they react this way? What did the shaman say?
  • Seeing some real choppy patches in your writing; one example is the last paragraph of the Latara section.
  • Your "Scouting for soap" section's quote isn't from that episode. Do you have anything more relevant?
  • Alliteration game is strong. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 03:09, November 30, 2013 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the review! Just a note that I'm facing the end-of-semseter gauntlet at the moment. I'll address all this in the next week or so, though. ~SavageBOB sig 12:26, December 5, 2013 (UTC)
    • OK, I've addressed almost everything; please take a look. Is there anywhere else you found the writing choppy? I didn't change the alliteration: it's not something I would do on every article, but I think it fits for this, a goofy cartoon character (plus, gotta have some outlet for things that aren't course papers…) One last thing, I added a short paragraph about his tribe being decimated by the Empire from Shadows of Endor. He doesn't actually appear in the comic, but it takes place pretty soon after the other events recounted in this article, so it seemed odd not to mention this stuff. Let me know if you think it would be better placed in the BTS, though. Thanks again! ~SavageBOB sig 13:42, December 13, 2013 (UTC)
      • Haha, the alliteration comment was a compliment. Article looks fine now. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:08, December 14, 2013 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • "but the captives were later freed in an attack on the Imperials led by a group of Ewoks from Bright Tree Village": is there a relevant event article to link here somewhere?
  • A minor formatting note: episode names should be formatted with quotation marks, while longer works (e.g. Ewoks the TV series or books/novels/etc.) should be italicized. Just something to keep in mind for the future. Good work otherwise. CC7567 (talk) 00:24, December 24, 2013 (UTC)
    • Big thanks for the edits and the review. The skirmish is now linked. One other note: In the FA for Unidentified Dulok (X), I italicized all the instances of X and O per the "words as words" rule in many style guides. Basically, when a word or letter is being discussed as a word or letter, most style guides suggest italicizing it. For instance, the word hello has five letters, the first of which is H. I wanted to bring this up before changing back to italics in the article in case there was some internal style rule I was overlooking. Either way, I think X and O should be consistent, so I'll need to change one or the other. :) ~SavageBOB sig 14:31, January 7, 2014 (UTC)
      • I'm actually not quite sure myself of what the proper formatting would be in this case (or if there's a generally preferred formatting over the other). Let me do some checking and I'll get back to you. CC7567 (talk) 06:37, January 8, 2014 (UTC)
        • Yeah, it's definitely a stylistic preference without any sort of hard-and-fast rule. Feel free to use either way. CC7567 (talk) 06:51, January 8, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 06:51, January 8, 2014 (UTC)