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Tula

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:34, November 1, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another Princess Leia nom.

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Support

  1. Cevan IMPpress (talk) 22:48, November 1, 2015 (UTC)
  2. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 14:48, June 11, 2016 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 23:34, October 16, 2016 (UTC)
  4. - Tommy-Macaroni Imperial Emblem (Talk) 13:23, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
  5. Imperators II(Talk) 19:54, September 8, 2017 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:07, September 16, 2017 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 21:47, September 18, 2017 (UTC)

Object

SE
  • Can you give some context on the Melodic order?
  • Is there a way to determine how long it was until Tace learned about the Death Star's destruction? Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:50, September 14, 2016 (UTC)
    • All we know is that is was shortly after the Battle of Yavin. Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:56, September 14, 2016 (UTC)
Imperators II
  • Can the Atlas really be used as a source for the date of Leia's mission?
    • Given a more detailed reference. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:46, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
  • Please source the BTS.
  • Review note: your paragraphs were way too long, you should break them up into smaller ones. This is more easily visible in the Wikia skin than in Monobook, so I recommend previewing your articles in the former. Imperators II(Talk) 13:56, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
    • Thanks, this has been something I've been trying to avoid lately, but I guess this article must predate me becoming more aware of it. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:46, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
  • Just want to check: did Princess Leia, Part IV really identify Dreed's Lamba-class shuttle by its full designation? Imperators II(Talk) 14:07, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
  • I'm not really seeing the need for the qualifier "new" here: "Once off Naboo on board Organa's new starship, the Lord Junn."
  • "seeing an opportunity to gain intelligence on rebel activity, Tula told Tace that it was her duty to stay with Organa" — up until this point there's no mention at all of rebels or the Rebel Alliance, just Imperial persecution of Alderaanian survivors and Alderaan Princess Organa's mission. You should either change the "rebel" to a more suitable word or explain the connection to the Rebel Alliance, or anyone actually rebelling, really. Imperators II(Talk) 14:29, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
    • Changed to specifically be about the Alderaanians. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:46, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
  • Your Venk GA states the Espirion Multi was sent by the Alder-Espirions, while here you say it was sent by both the Espirions and "Alderaanian inhabitants of Espirion" (?). Which one is it? Imperators II(Talk) 15:01, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
    • I think I meant to describe them as the hybrids but worded it poorly here. Fixed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:46, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
      • OK, but can you now link to Espirions and/or Alder-Espirions in that section as necessary (in the context of the Espirion Multi and the party), as well? Of course, see if that Espirion note is still necessary as a result. Imperators II(Talk) 17:08, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
        • Linked and removed the reference. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:46, September 8, 2017 (UTC)
  • I feel like the last sentence of P&T that talks about Tula's bond with Tace should be brought to the beginning of the section, before the parts talking about her loyalty to the Empire.
  • The mention of the Galactic Civil War is intro-exclusive.
  • Intro: "became aware of Tula's communications with Tace thanks to the inhabitants of the enclave." Completely no mention of the Enclave before this whatsoever. Imperators II(Talk) 15:26, August 30, 2017 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Just eyeballing this one up, I'm not sure you need four paragraphs for the intro, when the Bio only has nine. I realize intro paragraphs look bigger because the margins are smaller with the infobox, but it's still a little bit long. I'm roughly estimating the intro should probably be about half its current length. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:17, September 8, 2017 (UTC)
  • The first two quotes in the article vary on capitalizing "princess," despite being from the same source. Does one need to be fixed?
  • The way this is worded makes it seem like they were born at the same time like twins. If that's not the intended meaning, I would suggest instead saying "were both born on...": "The human sisters Tula and Tace were born together on the planet Alderaan..."
    • Oops, that's a left over from when I thought they were twins. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:06, September 16, 2017 (UTC)
  • The date reference doesn't really work without an implicit understanding that the Death Star was destroyed during the Battle of Yavin. As obvious as it may be, the ref should state this. Please be advised that if the comic series doesn't serve as a source for this information, you should credit it to something else.
    • Fixed the date ref since it shouldn't have actually been on that date anyway. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:06, September 16, 2017 (UTC)
  • For the Ultimate Star Wars reference, it would be better to either use a manual ref note explaining that USW identifies the shuttle used in the comic as Lambda-class or otherwise use a double ref note with the comic and USW next to the Lambda description.
  • At the end of the Bio, can we try and reword it a little to end with what Tula was doing rather than focusing on Tace? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:29, September 16, 2017 (UTC)
    • We actually aren't shown what happens to Tula after the battle, I can just remove the bit about the celebration if you'd like. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:06, September 16, 2017 (UTC)
      • That's probably for the best to keep the focus on Tula. The last sentence can just say the destroyed the Star Destroyer. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:43, September 16, 2017 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:45, September 24, 2017 (UTC)