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Troxan
- Nominated by: ~Savage
11:35, March 23, 2012 (UTC) - Nomination comments: Did this one aiming for a GA but overshot the mark. No images of them, but I imagine them as humanoid clownfish. ~Savage 11:35, March 23, 2012 (UTC)
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Support
--Eyrezer 09:39, April 1, 2012 (UTC)
Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 04:09, April 7, 2012 (UTC)- —Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 18:58, April 9, 2012 (UTC)
- Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:42, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
- David Schwimmer! Menkooroo 01:59, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:41, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
Object
I always thought they look like Loathsome
A link for the battle on Troxar?They sent a delegation to the Republic, but their appeals were rebuffed. They: Could you replace one of the "They"s?Could you mention that Dooku was Tyrannus and and both Sidious and Dooku were Sith in the intro?Unbeknownst to the Troxan envoys. Darth Sidious, master of Dooku, who was himself secretly a Sith Lord, considered Troxar an expendable world . I'm pretty sure that this fullstop is an error. I just want to be sure.What about the diplomat for the infobox?- Great work. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:22, March 28, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review, Lee! As for the battle, I'm not sure how to handle this. I seems like there was a prolonged war on Troxar, so what would that be called? "Battle of Troxar" sounds like it implies something short and fairly finite, but this was a long-term affair. Any suggestions? And with the diplomat, I'm not sure he's really all that important to his species. Technically, the infobox is supposed to be reserved for famous members of the species, although we don't always enforce that. High government officials seem to fit that bill, but maybe not lowly diplomats. What do you think? The other stuff has been addressed. Thanks again! ~Savage 02:08, March 31, 2012 (UTC)
- No problem, I always like to read a good-written article. With the diplomat I'm fine if you keep it as it is, I agree that he is not that important than the governement officials. For the battle, I would consider naming it something like "Invasion of Troxar" as the Republic clearly invaded the planet or "Troxan conflict" because it seems to be a longer fight than just one big battle. Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:42, April 1, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review, Lee! As for the battle, I'm not sure how to handle this. I seems like there was a prolonged war on Troxar, so what would that be called? "Battle of Troxar" sounds like it implies something short and fairly finite, but this was a long-term affair. Any suggestions? And with the diplomat, I'm not sure he's really all that important to his species. Technically, the infobox is supposed to be reserved for famous members of the species, although we don't always enforce that. High government officials seem to fit that bill, but maybe not lowly diplomats. What do you think? The other stuff has been addressed. Thanks again! ~Savage
Jujiggum
"the tide of the hostilities seemed to turn against them." Why the speculative tone? Did they only seem to do so? Or did they actually turn against them?Do we know what the wax candle from Amidala meant?Do we know what was in the box the Troxan delivered to the Jedi Temple?- That's all from me. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 22:25, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Well, I was trying to keep things as relevant to the Troxans as possible, but I can see that the contents of the packages might be important. I've added them, keeping it as simple as possible. As for the first objection, again, my intention was to show how the Troxans perceived the battle, but it's objectively true top, so I changed that one as well. Thanks for taking a look! ~Savage 01:50, April 7, 2012 (UTC)
- Well, I was trying to keep things as relevant to the Troxans as possible, but I can see that the contents of the packages might be important. I've added them, keeping it as simple as possible. As for the first objection, again, my intention was to show how the Troxans perceived the battle, but it's objectively true top, so I changed that one as well. Thanks for taking a look! ~Savage
Dark Redezvous is excellent
Based on Bio & Appearance's quote, would we be able to say in that same section that they have fingers and retinas?- Since some Troxans are males, could Bio & Appearance mention that they had at least one sex?
- Does the term "High Master" come from the book? I thought "Grand Master" was the exclusive title, but I could be wrong.
I agree with Lee that the conflict needs an article. That's all, though.Excellent work. Menkooroo 03:59, April 13, 2012 (UTC)- I'm not sure we can infer they have those things, since the package is intended for Yoda. I've added a note to that effect in the BTS, though. The High Master thing was added by someone else, I think; the book uses "Grand Master," so I've changed it back. I've added a link to the Troxar conflict and will try to turn it blue later today. Thanks for the review! ~Savage 12:31, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
- I'm not sure we can infer they have those things, since the package is intended for Yoda. I've added a note to that effect in the BTS, though. The High Master thing was added by someone else, I think; the book uses "Grand Master," so I've changed it back. I've added a link to the Troxar conflict and will try to turn it blue later today. Thanks for the review! ~Savage
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 14:41, April 14, 2012 (UTC)