Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Troig/Legends

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Troig

  • Nominated by: ~SavageBOB sig 22:15, November 29, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A species nom for the Phantom Menace barn burner. I know I already have three articles on the page, so I would ask reviewers to focus on this and subsequent TPM BB noms until the barn burner is over. And thanks! ~SavageBOB sig 22:15, November 29, 2011 (UTC)

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. —Axinal Convocation Chamber 17:06, November 30, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Wonderful! Menkooroo 21:03, January 20, 2012 (UTC)
  3. No complaints here. Your articles are usually pretty darn solid. Trak Nar Ramble on 05:46, January 21, 2012 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote --Eyrezer 23:17, January 21, 2012 (UTC)
  5. Plagueis327 18:59, February 4, 2012 (UTC)
  6. Nice read. I always thought these guys were awesome.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 14:54, February 14, 2012 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 22:46, March 22, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Axinal

Very nice work, Bob. Your thoroughness never ceases to impress me. I have only a few questions:

  • First, you mention that Troigs have "backward-bent knees." Does the Power of the Jedi source actually state that their knees are backwards, or could they just be high-situated ankles like those of birds?
  • Also, you mention pink as one of their skin colors in the infobox, but not in the body; instead, you include orange in the body. I'm just looking for consistency.
  • I find the last sentence in the second-to-last paragraph of the BTS to be a bit confusing. I understand the meaning, but the phrase "multiple heads and arms, and tails" seems a bit awkward. I think this could be remedied as easily as replacing the second "and" with "as well as," but I'll leave that up to you. Good work!—Axinal Convocation Chamber
    • Very nice points. All should be addressed. (Looking at the image from Wildlife of Star Wars, it seems they are indeed digitigrade (the fancy term for having feet like a bird, I think. Terryl Whitlatch seems to really like that configuration.) ~SavageBOB sig 04:21, November 30, 2011 (UTC)
      • Nice work. The only thing I have now is the sentence "The feet were barely distinguishable from the conical lower leg," since it seems we've established that the "lower leg" actually is the foot.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 09:25, November 30, 2011 (UTC)
        • That's right. I think it's OK now. ~SavageBOB sig 12:24, November 30, 2011 (UTC)
Better than one
  • Just a few: "Society and culture" doesn't make it clear that Pollillus is their homeworld. It mentions a homeworld, then mentions Pollilus a few sentences later in what seems like it could potentially be an unrelated point. Can you tie the two points together?
  • The intro makes it clear that the Troigs are discovered shortly before the Invasion of Naboo, but the "around that year" in "History" is less specific. I demand moar specificity (and maybe mention the Invasion outside of the intro)!
  • The GRS dates given on the HNN website indicate that they take place in 22 BBY, so you could give a more exact date for the head separation thing. The Clone Wars, or at least their kickoff, should be dated anyway, and probably the Battle of Endor too.
  • "Not all offworld Troigs worked in the entertainment industry, though" reads like it was intended to immediately follow the examples given of entertainer Troigs. I think it would flow better if it preceded the Dex's Diner stuff.
  • The jump from present to past tense in the final paragraph of the BTS is a bit off --- the rules are described as eternal, in present tense, which makes the "later amended" confusing. A little bit of past tense in the original stats might be in order.
  • All from me! You must have used two heads to produce such a fine article. Menkooroo 04:47, January 17, 2012 (UTC)
    • Two heads are definitely better than one. Have a look and thanks for the review. ~SavageBOB sig 13:49, January 19, 2012 (UTC)
Eyrezer (MC)
  • Is "emcee" a word? I always thought it stood for Master of Ceremonies. --Eyrezer 06:36, January 17, 2012 (UTC)
    • I think you're right about the origins of the word, but my dictionary lists it as an acceptable variant of the term. Maybe it's an Americanism? I can change it to "host" with little shift in meaning, I think. ~SavageBOB sig 13:38, January 19, 2012 (UTC)
      • That change would be good, thanks. --Eyrezer 19:39, January 19, 2012 (UTC)
        • The MC has left the building! ~SavageBOB sig 15:23, January 21, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:46, March 22, 2012 (UTC)

  • I changed "three Troigs" in the final paragraph of "Troigs in the galaxy" to "three and a half Troigs" to support the quote. Let me know if you think it should be left as just three.—Axinal Convocation Chamber 17:06, November 30, 2011 (UTC)
  • Two things that aren't really objections. One, why do you add <!--(date)--> in the Appearances and Sources? I've never seen this on any other articles, so why would it be needed here? Second, per the recent Mofference, the periods need to be removed from the ref notes that are not complete sentences. Otherwise, great work.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 03:45, February 14, 2012 (UTC)
    • Thanks for stopping by! I add the date thing because it makes sorting references infinitely easier. It's a quality of life issue to have them there for me, since sorting refs without them is truly cumbersome. As for the periods, I'm tempted to cry SOFIXIT since I wasn't able to make the Mofference and vociferously defend them as being more academic (they are, as checking most any book put out by an academic publisher will attest). But I can get to them soon, grumbling grumbling. (I'm a bit annoyed about that change, but I"m being tongue in cheek here, Cal.:P In the end, I understand the desire for uniformity.) ~SavageBOB sig 13:13, February 14, 2012 (UTC)
      • Okay. With the date thing, it bugs me, because I like uniformity in everything, even that. However, there's nothing particularly wrong with it, so I'll not make a big fuss about it. For the periods, I would normally SOFIXIT, but since you didn't attend the Mofference, I wasn't sure if you had seen the change, and I thought you should know for your other articles that this affects. Great work, and I'll go ahead and support in faith that you'll get on those periods as soon as possible.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 14:53, February 14, 2012 (UTC)
        • Done (I think)! And again, please note my comments were intended in jest. I really do appreciate the review and respect your drive for unity of style. ~SavageBOB sig 18:47, February 14, 2012 (UTC)