Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Trigalis

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Trigalis

(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)

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Support

  1. Inqvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 22:37, March 11, 2018 (UTC)
  2. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 20:40, March 13, 2018 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 16:41, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
  4. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 12:10, April 1, 2018 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:06, April 8, 2018 (UTC)
  6. grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 07:51, April 9, 2018 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:06, April 15, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Ecks Dee
  • "Inviting Kenobi to another room of the fortress, Xist told the Jedi that, while he couldn't confirm the veracity of rumors about Ventress's survival, he did know that the Confederate leader Dooku had sent one of his best agents to assassinate Xist's rival,[2] the arms dealer[12] Drama Korr, when the latter arrived at the[2] Karthakk sector[13] world of Maramere in a few days' time." Bit of a run-on sentence here.
    • Split into three sentences.
  • "He was then seen off a landing platform by Secura, who had loaned Kenobi her starfighter" What are you trying to say here? Was he seen off at a landing platform (i.e. she said goodbye to him at the platform) or was he seen right next to a platform? I'm thinking it's the former, but something is missing nonetheless. 1358 (Talk) 23:54, March 20, 2018 (UTC)
    • Indeed it was the former; went with your suggestion. Imperators II(Talk) 00:06, March 21, 2018 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I feel like the intro would be better served as two paragraphs instead of four. I would recommend combining the first and second paragraphs into one larger paragraph while removing the fourth one about Celot Ratua Dil, which really isn't all that critical for the intro summary. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:52, March 31, 2018 (UTC)
  • In the infobox's fauna field, since it's not referencing a specific species and assuming there is more than one bird and one insect pictured, I think it would be better to pluralize both of those. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:06, April 6, 2018 (UTC)
  • I find it a little unusual to suddenly refer to him as an assassin here when he's never previously associated with assassinations. The article just refers to him as the local Black Sun leader. Maybe just call him "Black Sun leader" here? "When he was finally defeated, the Black Sun assassin agreed to reveal to the Jedi..." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:48, April 6, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 03:07, April 15, 2018 (UTC)