Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Treis Sinde

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Treis Sinde

  • Nominated by: Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:26, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: GA, upgrading to FA with the completed release of the "Fight Another Day" story arc. Legacy comic spoilers.

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:31, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 15:18, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Thefourdotelipsis 02:25, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Lord Hydronium 22:30, 20 April 2009 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 22:39, 20 April 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. There's a lot of sentences starting off with participles (examples: "Infiltrating the Imperious...", "Rescuing the pilots...", "Instructing three of the pilots...", etc.). The sentence structure starts to feel tired, and it could use more variation. - Lord Hydronium 22:57, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
  2. A couple of things from Fiolli:
    • The subsection "Escape from Dac" begins with "To do this…" Please define "this." It is the start of a new subsection.
      • Left over from an old revision where there was no sectioning.
    • There are a lot of offset em dash clauses in the article. I happen to like offset clauses, but there are two places where there are too many in succession or close proximity. They are:
      • The first paragraph of "A bold plan" (One in each of the first two sentences)
        • Second one removed and wording rejigged.
      • The first paragraph of "Confronting the Leviathan" (3 total; two in first two sentences)
        • I am dash happy. Reworked the first two.
    • That's all. Nice work, Cav. — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:35, 20 April 2009 (UTC)#**Many thanks! - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 08:28, 20 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:39, 20 April 2009 (UTC)