Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tomb of Miktrull

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Tomb of Miktrull

  • Nominated by: Marvacian Archivist (talk) 16:55, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: This one has been a long time coming!
  • Date Archived: 02:20, 12 November 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 1889 words (137 introduction, 1409 body, 343 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:VG

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Support

Object

Lew
  • The BBY date in the infobox cannot be cited to the game
  • 'Miktrull, a revered Force-sensitive Zeffo Sage who was described as having unending power in the Life Wind' described by who?
  • I'm unsure of the need to include the Dark Temple stuff in the BTS when you already mention it in the body itself, instead you could perhaps replace the image of the temple from that series with an image from the update of JFO that you mention Lewisr (talk) 22:41, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
    • All done. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 10:26, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
      • I think an image of the challenge itself instead of the menu screen would be better Lewisr (talk) 14:22, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
        • I've tried to however they are quite blurry. Only ones I've managed to get good images on are images with the counting number 3, 2, 1 before the challenge starts. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 15:30, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
          • Hmm I see, thanks for trying anyway
  • I believe you'll need a source for the date of the update Lewisr (talk) 15:50, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Miktrull in the intro needs context
  • In the intro, I think you could explain in a little more detail what Cal's actions were that led to the Empire discovering the tomb and probably make it into 2 similar sized paragraphs
  • The Imperial Era section in history should be sectioned itself
    • (Only referring to Objection above), Done. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 08:01, 23 September 2023 (UTC)
      • The two above have been left unstruck because they haven't been addressed Lewisr (talk) 17:13, 15 October 2023 (UTC)
  • You don't need to include before 14 BBY in the infobox, it's unnecessary and slightly redundant to say something was constructed before it appeared in its material unless there was a specific date you could establish it as being constructed by
  • Your first mention of Cal in the body is just referring to him by his surname, please revise Lewisr (talk) 00:08, 23 September 2023 (UTC)
Fan
Intro
  • I'm not sure comparing the architecture to the temple on Ontotho is general enough info for the introductory paragraph; that's too specific IMO.
  • context for Project Auger
    • "Project Auger excavation work" is not proper context. Fan26 (Talk) 23:48, 22 September 2023 (UTC)
      • Done. Also, if possible could you check the objections below as I have also addressed those. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 08:16, 23 September 2023 (UTC)
  • Context and link for "the Life Wind" Fan26 (Talk) 19:07, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
Description
  • Date for Order 66 would be nice, to help give a timeframe for when the crash would've occurred.
  • The third paragraph of this section-its first sentence needs to be cleaned up. "The main hall contained many entrances with one entrance including a puzzle course powered by Zeffonian technology that could manipulate the gravitational pull of the planet which was inhabited by the parasitic, plant-like skungus, the subterranean, verminous scazz and the mountainous, horned, territorial phillaks." Is the entrance inhabited by these creatures? Or the planet? The way this sentence is worded I legitimately cannot tell. Fan26 (Talk) 19:07, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
  • "Miktrull, a revered Force-sensitive Zeffo Sage." revered by whom? Fan26 (Talk) 18:42, 27 August 2023 (UTC)
AC
  • I think it would be preferred if the images in the article were taken with the game's photo mode to exclude Kestis and BD-1. If you would like, I am willing to replay to that part in the game to get the same images, but just without the player. —Unsigned comment by AmazinglyCool (talk • contribs)
    • Is it possible if you could take the photos using the game's photo mode? Marvacian Archivist (talk) 10:25, 10 September 2023 (UTC)
      • Yeah, just give me about a week's time, I'll DM you the photos on Discord as I take them and you can let me know if you want anything changed or adjusted. AmazinglyCool Nightsisters symbol - JFO (talk) 21:22, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
  • Not required, but useful: You may be able to extract audio for some of the quotes from a silent youtube longplay or something similar. —Unsigned comment by AmazinglyCool (talk • contribs)

Comments

  • Not sure if regular users are allowed to comment, but I'd place the picture labeled "Inside the tomb" a bit lower in the section to better space out the pictures. I would also give the labels in the section a bit more detail to describe where and what in the tomb is being pictured. SorcererSupreme21 (talk) 14:06, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
    • Anyone and everyone is welcome to contribute on nomination pages! Don't be shy, it's not just for the review board members! Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:19, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
      • Hi. I've placed the image a bit lower and specified where the image is from. As Cade Calrayn was saying, feel free to write any objections you have in the "Object" section of the nomination page. Make sure to write your username first and then your objections like what Lewisr did above. Marvacian Archivist (talk) 16:19, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Unaddressed objections since last reply 28d ago; initial objection issued late September.—spookywillowwtalk 02:10, 12 November 2023 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 02:10, 12 November 2023 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:19, 12 November 2023 (UTC)